sensitivity

       

 

I really don't want to grow up, friend.

I'm scared to grow up.

You were the only one who ever felt like home,
and now you're gone too.

I miss the way winter was and I gag at the way spring came.

I hate the way I feel when I see your name.

Let's start over, a brand new day.

Help me forget your face,
cause i'm forgeting everything but.

Regret is overrated.

I'll take my trip to the moon now.

 

Author's Note

This is my favorite that I have written. It's clearly about not wanting to move on and being stubborn.

Reviews

[Jonathan Ballam]

I really enjoyed reading this. the last line in particular struck me. Your writing seem to have an unbridled sense of freedom in it that is catchy.

Think about shortening the line "I miss the way...spring came". for example i'd take out the second 'the way' so it reads: "I miss the way winter was and I gag in spring."

I would also suggest that you read more poetry than you write...it's something that helped grow my poetry hugely.

[nukamichianpaux]

I think this is marvelous, just the way it is.

[Jaffa Forbes]

Change is really hard yes, we like to cling on to things I think, even just little things that remind us of other things. Embracing change is good though, very releasing me thinks. On the poetry side of things, it's really good. Your style reminds me of a type of poetry I haven't seen for a while. That's not very helpful is it? Anyway, great last line, brilliant emotions portrayed. Love it. Give it a title though!
Jaff :)

[bluessadmood]

This was so nice,so so dreamy..I loved it..
I really dont want to grow,never wanted to grow up
You were the only one who felt like home to me,but you too are gone
How I miss my winter,how I loathe the coming of spring..it make me feel time is running on me
I am forgetting everything ,so help me forget your face..no more regrets..its time to shoot for the moon now..feeling out of place
ohh what loveliness,some wondering thoughts..thats how I could read you..
lovely write..