Decision

Decision

A Poem by Manel
"

Life after you

"
My life is mine to live
My heart is mine to give
I Owe the choice to forgive
Its time for  you to leave
'Cause I'm not naïve 
To stand your lies like EVE
No time to be negative 
The world is mine that's my belief

© 2016 Manel


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Manel
My first try

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The perfect way to express the statement "Its time for you to leave" in the poem.
"'Cause I'm not naïve
To stand your lies like EVE"
"My heart is mine to give
I Owe the choice to forgive"

There are some lines where I felt like the most powerful means of expressing your sentiments.
I loved the way, I loved the emotions tried to express, I just loved the poem.
Thanks for sharing:) :) :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Manel

8 Years Ago

thank you so much for passing by i appreciate it
Manel, its a straight forward "Decision" and very well written the only thing being please check this "I Owen the choice to forgive" It should be "I owe the choice to forgive" and not Owen!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Manel

8 Years Ago

thanks a lot for your remarks they are always useful christina
Christina

8 Years Ago

Continue to write more Manel I love reading your writings, God Bless!
and a great try it is ! stand tall,it`s your life

Posted 8 Years Ago


Manel

8 Years Ago

thank you ; yes it is and im going for it
Crystal clear message to the world. I really liked it. Sometimes we take these words for granted, but until we actually act upon them, they will always remain, well, words.
You seem like a brave person, keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Manel

8 Years Ago

thanks for your kind words
This feels like a bold statement if my understanding of where you are is correct! The reference to eve is well done and little unique. Not the evil one, but the one lies to. Do you want to know about typos?

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shannon

8 Years Ago

Own is how you spell a word that means it belongs to you. Owen is a name.

You are we.. read more
Manel

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot
Manel

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot

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Added on March 13, 2016
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Manel
Manel

Oued Rhiou, Islam, Algeria



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