Freedom

I haven't posted anything in a while,so this is something I wrote two days ago.

All my life I've wished to be a bird,

to spread my wings and breath in my freedom.

to fly carelessly across the ocean,and enjoy the sun

to hum a beautiful melody,and let time pass me by

But,oh,how blind I've been,

Oh,how numb my heart has been

Oh,how cold my soul has become

Could freedom really crush you down?

Driving so fast,you can barely see the road

Could freedom really make you blind?

Closing your eyes,for your mother's tears

Does freedom really has a violent roar?

And after quite a while,you find yourself fading

You find yourself useless,numb,forgotten

And after quite a while,you're not free anymore

You're under death's heavy burden.

Oh,sweet freedom,

How you've ruined me

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Freedom is a two-sided coin. Can blind you from responsibility and can allow you to be free of any burdens. I like your description. Cost of freedom is costly and hard to maintain. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

Freedom comes with responsibility. This was a wonderful write...:)...................

[Ankur Sharma]

freedom but afraid of what would happen after getting it that was really a brilliant thought.

[Mandyy Reed]

Thank you, I really appreciate it

[Liz]

There are some capitalization and spacing after commas errors, but thats an easy fix.
Anyways, I like the questions that are incorporated into the third stanza.
"Could freedom really crush you down?"
"Could freedom really make you blind?"
When you really think about it, are any of us nearly as free as we're meant to be?

[Mandyy Reed]

Ah,I know,It's just that my language is far more complicated than english.So when it comes to commas in the english language,I get really confused.I'm sorry.But thank you so much for the review