This was simple and to the point, and yet still it has a wave of beauty going across it, I wish I could write like this! You emotions are portrayed vividly, and that's something that I don't come across on this. The way it ended was gorgeous, with that last stanza, you used it as a dagger and showed you really know how to use your pen. Beautiful job!
-Cathrine
This happens to me all the time with like 4 of my friends. I finally just stopped hanging out with them. Well, except one, because she's only like that part of the time, if you know what to say and what not to do. Other than that she's fun =) Anyway, it was a great poem and I loved it. Keep writing!
Fantastic... the fact that so may friendships happen like this makes it even more wonderful than it is! So it's double the wonderfulness... lol
God, I envy people who can capture these emotions and create it into something worth wild, and shockingly beautiful! :)
Favorite lines:
"But no
You refused to listen"
It happens a million times but still we refuse to listen... it's sickening.
"And yet
I still tried to help you
But again
You couldn't handle the truth"
Perfect line right there! Fantastic poem, truly! :)
I think we all have moments like this. I know I have drove my friends crazy at times and didn't take their advise and things turned out horrible but I am lucky that they are still my friends and I try to remember this when I get frustrated with them. It is a great way to vent your feelings without hurting that person. Nicely done.
She is being stupid if you are trying to help her and she isn't listening. I know how that feels with some of my guy friends. I try to help them, but they don't listen to me and they end up getting hurt. If they come crying to me I really don't care anymore and I stop listening. I really think that she should listen to you. You are basically telling her the truth. Anyways this was a good write. And I can feel your emotions. Thanks for sharing. :)
This was simple and to the point, and yet still it has a wave of beauty going across it, I wish I could write like this! You emotions are portrayed vividly, and that's something that I don't come across on this. The way it ended was gorgeous, with that last stanza, you used it as a dagger and showed you really know how to use your pen. Beautiful job!
-Cathrine
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