Good Girl Gone Bad

She cheated. She cant love. There is not one good bone in her body.

Don't let her long blonde hair, and dark green eyes fool you.
Beyond her beauty lies a monster.
She stirs the night waiting for her next victim.
Her eyes hypnotize you.
Her kisses put you under a lust spell.
One so strong, there is no way to escape.
She torments you and makes you give her, her every desire.
She loves to tie you up and watch you scream in pain.
You can't trust her, nor can you love her.
So don't let her beauty fool you.
For she is another good girl gone bad.

Author's Note

This is kind of different. I dont know what you will think, so give me your opinions please!

Reviews

[Rodrick Franklin McLare..]

Gladly, sounds like the start of a good vampire short possibly. Maybe a suspense triller, with a unique twist ending. Many different types of relationship correlating with my imagination, came from this. It could be written from, either the 1st or 2nd character representation...

1st) My man dumping me! For this beautiful Bimbo. At that party we had attended together, and he's going for this Monster. That will only chew him up and for laughs. Throw him away? instead of accepting our steady loving intellectual bonds and long term love. I could just kill her, or hey?
Both of them... by god. There's, an idea that! What is she. this pretender. Who would care, for she is another good girl gone bad. Too bad, for her!

2nd) Lulu had a best friend Henrie, and knew. He was going after the ugly beauty. Stupid Man. He'd just hooked up with her, and couldn't see. What was really perking away, bellow that oh so precious representation. Was a, true monster and Lulu knew. Her long time friend, was heading stupidly blinded by binding lust. For real trouble!...

Yes, I get all that, and as a novelist. Read that kind of potential expansion from this piece. In its stimulating portrayal...
"She stirs the night waiting for her next victim.
Her eyes hypnotize you!"
This kind of phrasing is masterful, it hides such real succulent tension.
It talks to you...
I really feel that you should use this piece as a base, allow it to percolate in your subconscious and tell you a story, Well maybe outside the reality that inspired you, to express this burning piece.
I believe it would make.... A KILLER STORY!
LOL... and yes. Title it: 'Good girl gone Bad' ;) Write on Girl! (right on)

[deeps]

This is quite interesting,
I like it. Very well written.

[Shalini Dinesh]

its like an red alert alarm to the guys not to fall in the spell of good girls gone bad :)

[Satchmo's Gal]

Awesomeness. Like always :)

[Jess.]

Pretty wicked sounding! I like it :)

[Tina Kline]

A female predator who knows what she wants and is on the hunt. Some guys will want to be caught by her.

[Cassandra D.]

This was very interesting... I don't really read a lot of poems here with anything like that. nicely done

[SamBug]

Great write!

[Daydreamer54]

Wow this was awesome! The girl's a she wolf looking for her next prey!@ lol! it's true some girls r like this and try their charm to get a boy to do whatever they want.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked this. It does remind me of that song. Though I hate it with a passion. I would agree don't let people fool you. You never know what they are really are like until you get to know them. Thanks for sharing. :)