On The Run

On The Run

A Poem by Manda
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She runs all over the guys. Shes a w***e reading to hit the spot! Better watch yourself!

"
Oh God
That B***h
Is On The Run
Again

She's Hot
And Loves
To Hit
The Spot

You Better
Call The Cops
Before It's Too Late
And You Take The Bait

Her Long Blonde Hair
And Big Green Eyes
Will Make You Want To Die
Because She Is So Damn Fine

Oh God
Here That B***h Comes
So You Better Run
For You're Her Next One

© 2010 Manda


Author's Note

Manda
I don't know... something different I guess.

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I'm guessing it's about how maybe some guys get distracted by beauty and not actually notice how awful the person is. Like it says how "you better run" for maybe I think it's saying run from her deceitful ways. This really reminds me of this quote "There are two kinds of light - the glow that illumines, and the glare that obscures" (James Thurber).


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Well different is good, because I loved it. I thought that maybe you would have a set rhyme scheme, but it was still great without it. Great job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Haha, I loved this :)

"Here that b***h comes!" is my fave line. Mwahaha. :D

Posted 14 Years Ago


I have known a couple of these ladies... dangerous but worth the risk.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Intense. Haha, I liked the short and sharpness of this poem, and the way it kind of read like lyrics to a song. It is certainly different from what you usually write, but it's good to change it up sometimes. :) Nice write,
~PaperHearts

Posted 14 Years Ago


I thought it was pretty good. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


yOU GOTTA BE KIDDING

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I’m kind of lost, is she good or bad for me, but that’s cool cause its got me wondering
Good write well done


Posted 14 Years Ago


Interesting twist Manda. This poem differs from many of your other ones. This poem isn't written in first person, so it's interesting to see. I think its very good and entertaining to an extent. Try to come up with a different maybe more captivating third stanza. I like it but not so much these lines:
Before It's Too Late
And You Take The Bait
I liked it overall.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Reminds me of an ex lol.

Posted 14 Years Ago


alright, this is nice, but could be better. the flow was okay, but very erratic. sometimes erratic is good in a poem, but it didn't work so well here. the words were nice, and the idea was great, but i think you can put it down in a better way.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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