Love And Lust
A Poem by
Manda
They are so in love. Loving and lusting with one another in the sheets. Forever
Me and you Laying in bed Our bodies Naked and touching There's a burning sensation Of love and lust As we play In the sheets
© 2010 Manda
Author's Note
Just something... Feelings of love and lust makes me go crazy
Reviews
wonderful piece
Posted 13 Years Ago
recently, I've come in contact with things like this.
It's really pretty, and it rolls off your tounge.
Posted 13 Years Ago
recently, I've come in contact with things like this.
It's really pretty, and it rolls off your tounge.
short sweet and to the point i like it it tells the feeling without being to detailed and it gets the point across easily good job!
Posted 13 Years Ago
short sweet and to the point i like it it tells the feeling without being to detailed and it gets the point across easily good job!
simple&nice
Posted 14 Years Ago
simple&nice
This is good, I wish you had elaborated some..as it has the potiental to be even better..nice though.
Posted 14 Years Ago
This is good, I wish you had elaborated some..as it has the potiental to be even better..nice though.
Hmm, not bad, not bad. I kind of wish you had dug deeper into the emotional side of such a situation, but I did like the directness of your poem. The short and sharp lines worked really effectively, particularly near the beginning. Not quite there yet, but a great start nonetheless. :)
~PaperHearts
Posted 14 Years Ago
Hmm, not bad, not bad. I kind of wish you had dug deeper into the emotional side of such a situation, but I did like the directness of your poem. The short and sharp lines worked really effectively, particularly near the beginning. Not quite there yet, but a great start nonetheless. :)
~PaperHearts
I like the simplicity of this... a simple as two people naked together and thrilled by the feeling of bare flesh and soft touch and beating hearts and sheer arousal...
Posted 14 Years Ago
I like the simplicity of this... a simple as two people naked together and thrilled by the feeling of bare flesh and soft touch and beating hearts and sheer arousal...
Interesting. Such a small poem but straight to the point. Very cute.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Interesting. Such a small poem but straight to the point. Very cute.
Aws! I love this! Very sweet and romantic! Hehe >_< Thank you very much for sharing this poem! =) -Rachel
Posted 14 Years Ago
Aws! I love this! Very sweet and romantic! Hehe >_< Thank you very much for sharing this poem! =) -Rachel
I like this piece. It is short and to the point - nothing unnecessary in evidence.
Posted 14 Years Ago
I like this piece. It is short and to the point - nothing unnecessary in evidence.
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Hello! My names Manda. I am 24 years of age and have an Associate of Arts degree. I am a former National Honors Society member and am hoping to continue my education by starting my Bachelors degree in..
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