Unknown Killer

Unknown Killer

A Poem by Manda
"

She cant move because if she does she too will be dead.

"
I crouch in the corner
Afraid to make a sound
For my unknown killer might hear me
And take my precious life away from me

I dont know who
Or even what he is
Just another unknown killer
That took me from this life I lived

I hide away
In a room he keeps me in
Its dark
And smells of rotten wood

I am a lifeless soul
And another hopeless victim
Whose life is slowly
Fading away

Around me I see skeletons
Of unknown victims
That were hopeless souls like myself
Now dead....

I move an inch
And take one breath
And then I hear it
Footsteps from my unknown killer

The door opens
Here my unknown killer stands
He aims his gun at me
And bang! I'm dead...

© 2010 Manda


Author's Note

Manda
I dont know. I was just bored and everyone wanted something new so I guess this will have to do. Hope you like it! It mite need some work so tell me what you think

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spooky... reminds me of dreams of long ago that I'd rouse from scared and out of breath. I try "not to go there" such places that are scary for day to day life can be scarey enough! ;~) Keep on writing your thoughts down for the writing might be the key to getting through the days then nights of life.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this I thought it was very well written.
I love the ending, very well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Simple. exictng a clear storyline and plot thourought. A good piece of work, the repetition of my unkown killer adding a sinster and beautfu leffecct.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it.
It's perfect. Escpecially the ending,

He aims his gun at me
And bang! I'm dead...

It all flows pretty well, and it's really good!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chilling. I liked the feeling of hopelesness that really came across in this, and it being an unkown killer made it even more chilling because it seemed to be a cold hearted killer. Great write.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is really different than what you usually write, and I really liked the change :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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