Unknown Killer
A Poem by
Manda
She cant move because if she does she too will be dead.
I crouch in the corner Afraid to make a sound For my unknown killer might hear me And take my precious life away from me I dont know who Or even what he is Just another unknown killer That took me from this life I lived I hide away In a room he keeps me in Its dark And smells of rotten wood I am a lifeless soul And another hopeless victim Whose life is slowly Fading away Around me I see skeletons Of unknown victims That were hopeless souls like myself Now dead.... I move an inch And take one breath And then I hear it Footsteps from my unknown killer The door opens Here my unknown killer stands He aims his gun at me And bang! I'm dead...
© 2010 Manda
Author's Note
I dont know. I was just bored and everyone wanted something new so I guess this will have to do. Hope you like it! It mite need some work so tell me what you think
Reviews
I agree that the color aspect of it was pretty cool. It was a good piece. Great read.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Shocking what you think of
Posted 14 Years Ago
Shocking what you think of
Wow, interesting writing. I especially liked your use of color. The words being dark and the 'unknown killer' in red emphasized the character's situation. Nice work.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Wow, interesting writing. I especially liked your use of color. The words being dark and the 'unknown killer' in red emphasized the character's situation. Nice work.
Wow! Pretty damn amazing piece! The flow was great, it could almost be a song.
I loved it.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Wow! Pretty damn amazing piece! The flow was great, it could almost be a song.
I loved it.
That was so firickin emo. I loved it!!! My random pal liked it too.
Posted 14 Years Ago
That was so firickin emo. I loved it!!! My random pal liked it too.
Intense and a bit shocking!
Posted 14 Years Ago
Intense and a bit shocking!
Different, but bold and unqiue, its entertaining, yet thrilling, nice flow; great job.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Different, but bold and unqiue, its entertaining, yet thrilling, nice flow; great job.
well this is.........entertaining??? nah, i liked it..... a lot.......it would go with my story "went for a walk" I really liked it
Posted 14 Years Ago
well this is.........entertaining??? nah, i liked it..... a lot.......it would go with my story "went for a walk" I really liked it
Wow, wow and wow. I really like it much, I like how describe the moments so well and how you were trying to breath in the poem from fear Just so so so very well done.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Wow, wow and wow. I really like it much, I like how describe the moments so well and how you were trying to breath in the poem from fear Just so so so very well done.
This is quite thrilling.
"Just another unknown killer
That took me from this life I lived"
I really love the edge to this.
Keep up the great work!
-Elissa :D
Posted 14 Years Ago
This is quite thrilling.
"Just another unknown killer
That took me from this life I lived"
I really love the edge to this.
Keep up the great work!
-Elissa :D
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Added on April 6, 2010
Last Updated on April 6, 2010
Author
Manda OH
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Hello! My names Manda. I am 24 years of age and have an Associate of Arts degree. I am a former National Honors Society member and am hoping to continue my education by starting my Bachelors degree in..
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