Unknown Killer

Unknown Killer

A Poem by Manda
"

She cant move because if she does she too will be dead.

"
I crouch in the corner
Afraid to make a sound
For my unknown killer might hear me
And take my precious life away from me

I dont know who
Or even what he is
Just another unknown killer
That took me from this life I lived

I hide away
In a room he keeps me in
Its dark
And smells of rotten wood

I am a lifeless soul
And another hopeless victim
Whose life is slowly
Fading away

Around me I see skeletons
Of unknown victims
That were hopeless souls like myself
Now dead....

I move an inch
And take one breath
And then I hear it
Footsteps from my unknown killer

The door opens
Here my unknown killer stands
He aims his gun at me
And bang! I'm dead...

© 2010 Manda


Author's Note

Manda
I dont know. I was just bored and everyone wanted something new so I guess this will have to do. Hope you like it! It mite need some work so tell me what you think

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I agree that the color aspect of it was pretty cool. It was a good piece. Great read.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Shocking what you think of

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow, interesting writing. I especially liked your use of color. The words being dark and the 'unknown killer' in red emphasized the character's situation. Nice work.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow! Pretty damn amazing piece! The flow was great, it could almost be a song.
I loved it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


That was so firickin emo. I loved it!!! My random pal liked it too.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Intense and a bit shocking!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Different, but bold and unqiue, its entertaining, yet thrilling, nice flow; great job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


well this is.........entertaining??? nah, i liked it..... a lot.......it would go with my story "went for a walk" I really liked it

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow, wow and wow. I really like it much, I like how describe the moments so well and how you were trying to breath in the poem from fear Just so so so very well done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is quite thrilling.
"Just another unknown killer
That took me from this life I lived"
I really love the edge to this.
Keep up the great work!

-Elissa :D

Posted 14 Years Ago



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