I Fell For You

It had all started with a walk and then she ran into him! This gorgeous guy is so breath taking! He is a God!

Since the first day we met
I couldn't help but fall for you.

I remember walking down
That long narrow street.

I had come to a corner
And there you appeared.

You were shirtless
And wearing ripped navy blue shorts.

You had big brown eyes
And such a beautiful smile.

Your body was leaning against
A tall yellow pole.

You stood there
Showing off your muscular body.

You gave me that crooked smile
I love so very much.

The sun was beating off your face
Making you look even more like a god!

I had to look away
For I couldn't breath!

My heart was beating
A million times a minute.

My thought were everywhere
And I couldn't think straight!

I just stood there
Looking into those big beautiful eyes.

I didn't move
Or even breath.

I tried to speak
But nothing came out.

You left me speechless
And gasping for air!

I knew as I stood there
That this was it.

I had finally found
What I longed for.

I remember that day so well
How could I forget!

It was that very day
That I fell in love with you!

 ~I love you!~

Author's Note

I was just sitting around talking to a few people, when I decided to write about this! Its similar to what is happening to me now! It has meaning but I dont know if it makes sense. I dont know about the flow or even the grammar! Please give me your opinions and or advice! Dont rate if not good please! Trying to raise my status! Thanks!

Reviews

[zack]

u do a great job in iny poem u write

[rachielle]

I can visualize a surfer dude through this poem. It's very summery. I like the simplicity and detail. Good job.:)

[Wolfe Greytome]

This is another in a long line of wonderful pieces from you. Delightful use of imagery. However, the rhythm of the piece did seem a bit off in places - as did an occasional word choice. Overall, though, I was impressed with this piece. Well done!!!

[PaperHearts]

Aww, a cute write! Nice imagery, and a nice backstory too. I liked how you set the scene and progressed to the finishing line 'I love you'. I thought it was really sweet and heartfelt, and about a topic that I'm sure many of us can relate to.
~PaperHearts

[kbjami]

Okay I probably shouldn't be asking for a request in a review, but could you write maybe something different than the subject or subjects related to love?
I think these all are wonderful, but I want to see a little difference from you.

Then again . . . I havn't looked at some of your earlier works . . .

I'll look at them now, but just incase I'm requesting this.
Also you really do a great job on these type of poems

[Star Wolf]

Love at first sight! You gotta just believe in it!

[QuietPoet]

Very sweet and it made me smile. I had a picture in my head and I like the picture you used. Nice :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I read it earlier and I thought it was good. Thanks for sharing. :D

[Luna Northstar]

Sweet, kind and magical, great job!

[Tina Kline]

Falling in love, it can be so wonderful, like magic! You did a great job on this.