To Be With You

To Be With You

A Poem by Manda
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Its so hard. I dont know what to do. He makes me crazy but yet I dont know if Ill ever be able to be with him...

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Its so hard
Being without you.

I can't help but miss you
And long for you to return.

You're so cool
And you rule my world!

I love those big brown eyes
And that crooked smile.

Every time I see you
I can't help but gasp for air!

I love you
But I can't be with you.

It hurts to know
That you wont ever be mine

That I wont ever know what it was like
To be in love with you.

To never know what it felt like
To kiss you.

I always imagined us together
And being so in love.

But why?
When I wont ever be able to.

You're all I ever think about
Which makes it so hard for me.

You're everything to me
And I just want us to be together.

I want to be able to love you
Instead of always missing you.

I want to the know the feeling
Of loving you.

I want to know that feeling
Of kissing you.

But most of all I want to know what it feels like
To be with you.

I love you
I always will.

© 2010 Manda


Author's Note

Manda
I wrote this for Zack. And yes this comes from the heart. I dont know if it makes sense and I dont even know if the flow and grammar are good but I guess thats up to you to decide. I hope you like it! Dont be afraid to give me advice. Anything that will make this poem better is always good! If there is something wrong with it just comment and not rate. I am trying to raise my status! Thanks!

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when we love and can't be with love -- pain lives inside i loved this one as well

Posted 14 Years Ago


Aww, a very cute poem! Relatable, heartfelt, and full of the exuberant highs of first love. The only thing I would say is to be a bit weary of using cliched lines, as they can get slightly tedious sometimes and lose the true effect that you're going for. Otherwise, great write! :)
~PaperHearts

Posted 14 Years Ago


ohhhh i know what that feels like sister, dont even get me started! this poem even has the same exact feel as me, which makes me love it more!

Posted 14 Years Ago


You totally put your heart and soul into this. I love the flow of this, the emphasis you have, and the way you expressed it. You can totally see the saturated emotion radiate from this.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I've felt this way before! Knowing I have deep feelings for a guy and yet, I know my parents wouldn't approve of him and how I would never get that one chance to be with him. This feeling of pain truly hurts us...

Posted 14 Years Ago


i like this and i feel very similar for a girl right now so i guess this piece really spoke to me

Posted 14 Years Ago


I really enjoyed reading this so emotional poem. It is clear that you are deeply in love with "Mr Zack", whoever it is. He must be a blessed person to have your love.

About the poem, not all the time grammar matters; it is the emotion. Your work is full of that, and it seems so real and somber.

Thank you.

Raja

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like how you created emphasis here.

By repeating certain lines, you created emphasis which is what gave made it come across very genuine.
Overall, nicely written, very relatable,
Good job

Posted 14 Years Ago


I know this feeling :( It sucks!
THIS WAS AMAZING!!! I almost started crying. You're an amazing poet, you know how to pack a punch with emotions!
I have no problems with this piece whatsoever!
LOVED it! even though it was about something sad

Posted 14 Years Ago



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