Game Of Love

She looks at him unable to look away. Hes so sexy! She plays with him and watches him with her wide open! He falls for her tricks.

Hey sexy
You want to play?

I cant help but notice
You looking right at me.

Your big brown eyes
Meeting mine for the first time.

Oh God!
You are so sexy!

You're given me that perfect smile
Showing those gorgeous white teeth.

I cant help but stare
And gasp for air!

You stand proudly
Showing off your muscular body.

Oh how I wish
You were mine!

You look like a god
From up above.

I looked away
But it was hard to stay away.

I felt your eyes
Beating on the back of my head.

I turned around
And met your gaze once again

We stood there
Watching each other....

And then it happened!
He moved in
And kissed me.

The kiss was sweet
And such a treat!

My hands
Wrapped around his precious neck.

I couldnt believe
That this was happening.

I had fallen for his little game
Called love.

...And now
He was all mine!

Author's Note

OK I just wrote this, but I dont know if it even makes any sense. If it needs work please tell me and give me advice. Thank You

Reviews

[Chloe Christine]

One, poetry doesn't HAVE to make sense. that's half the beauty, all the joy of writing it. it's why I love it so much.
Two, this made sense. Very clear to me, anyways.
Three, Amazing. :) i loved itt.
you're so talented! i bet you write a book one day. :)

[AbsentElements]

Not only do poems not have to make sense, but this one does. It tells a rather creative story. Very nice

[PaperHearts]

Cute! The intensity and constant feeling of motion when you're in love is something that I think many of us will be able to relate to, and I thought that you reflected this really well in your poem. I liked how light-hearted and sweet the narration of this piece was; it kind of felt like you were an excited friend telling me about something exciting that had happened to you. Hehe, keep writing!
~PaperHearts

[LynLee]

ha little game called love! im falling for it too cuz i love this poem!

[The Wave]

it does make sense!

the story is definitely clear here. I do like how you described him, but somehow it sounds amateurish... It is a playful, fun type of poem, but I think a different approach (in writing style) about temptation would have been more interesting.
overall, it has great flow and is written very well.
Good job.

[*Kantola*]

Awww, this was adorable! It made PLENTY sense!!! You're foolish to think it didn't! :)
I LOVED IT!!!
I just love brown eyes... :D All I'm sayin' lol.
"Oh how I wish
You were mine!"
Probably my favorite stanza, if that's what you want to call it :D I loved it, loved it, loved it, loved it, loved it!!! Great job, Manda!!

[Kon™]

I like the couplets, and I really thought there was a bit of humor in this and I loved that sort of uplifting, bright feeling this gave off. Nice touch. Keep it up :)

[Jane Doe]

PRETTTTTTTTTTYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I WUV IT

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

This is very sharp.
Excellent write!

[deeps]

This is so wonderful. I enjoyed this write.