Lovers In The Rain

Its a cold rainy day and they just stood there, when finally there lips met!

We are lovers in the rain
And nothing more

As we stand there in the pouring rain
Our lips meet for the first time

Our lips pressed hard against each other
Rain falling through the cracks

I rapped my hands around your wet neck
And you pulled me closer to you

The kiss became more intense
And our lips moving to the beat of our hearts

Its was sweet and so real
The rain releasing the burning sensation I felt inside

As we kissed
The rain was falling hard on our skin

Our bodies were soaking wet
But we never broke apart

We were lovers in the rain
And that's how it would stay

Author's Note

I dont care about flow or grammar. I was just looking at this picture and thought why not write about lovers in the rain. I hope you like it. Dont be afraid to criticize, I would love to hear what you have to say. If the rating is low please dont rate! Still trying to raise my status

Reviews

[*Kantola*]

Cute idea :)
There are always at least 1,000 words to go along with a picture (pun on the cliche, /sigh!)
Loved this piece!
Short, sweet, to the point :) i was able to easily picture what was happening. Sigh, I yearn for one of these moments... dont mind me, i'm a hopeless romantic :)
Great job narrating this picture, manda!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very soft and sensual piece. Nice little read.

[I Am Svetlana]

This is BEAUTIFUL!!!

[Holly-Marie]

So sweet. Some great description in there, cute and light hearted but meaningful and deep. Great work!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

It is a good poem. It is a good description of lovers in the rain. I can imagine it now. Thanks for sharing.

[Chloe Christine]

Amazing, amazing! This is so cute, I can imagine it soo perfectly in my head, you painted the PERFECT imagine! (:

[Havatara]

Awww so romantic! Kind of reminds me of a book I read, but they were lovers kissing on a summer day in a corn field, not in the rain =) Still, it's a nice idea and I liked the poem.

[PaperHearts]

This was really cute! I liked the way your poem progressed, and I thought that you expressed the emotions really well. The first stanza was an amazing way to start the poem, and in that sense, I thought that the last stanza was a bit weak in comparison. However, overall, this was a pretty good write. :)
~PaperHearts

[Jane Doe]

its all good i love it an hey better scrap than i put together

[The Wave]

Nice piece.

Definitely holds that raw, intense, and real emotion of lust and love combined. Great imagery, you make the words come to life.
Overall, written well... I would add periods and commas though, this slight bit of editing will help make it read with more emphasis and strength.
Good job.