Magic

He gives her magic when he talks to her. Its simply beautiful. But when he leaves her world is left depressing and dull... She doesnt know what to do with herself.

I dont know what to think
All I know is that you're something special

When I talk to you
Everything seems ok

All the emotions I felt
Wash away like sand
And suddenly I'm ok

For the few moments we talk
My world is beautiful

The birds are singing
And the sun is shining

The feeling so wonderful
It brings a smile to my face

But as soon as you leave
It all disappears

And then all the fears
And the tears
Come back to haunt me

I'm all alone
And so scared
Trying to shake away these fears

Its like for that one moment you were with me
You brought magic to my world

But when you left
You took your magic with you

And left me
And my emotions
Here...

Missing you
And your beautiful magic

Author's Note

I dont care about flow or grammar... If you dont like it or if you think it needs work please give me your advice. Dont rate unless its pretty high... trying to raise my status! Thanks

Reviews

[*Kantola*]

Oh my goodness... I absolutely loved this!!! I have no advice, except, there is a difference between "your" and "you're (you are)". "Your" is possessive, "You are" is a state of being. Just one little pet peeve of mine :) The rest was FANTASTIC!!
I know exactly how you feel. My best friend is going through something extremely similar and I have to watch her cry every moment she's away from him. It's terrible... I definitely felt those emotions of "ugh, i'm going to dread being away from him because it's going to make me sad!" :) Great job, Manda!
These pieces with a lot of emotion packed into them REALLY make me feel for the writer, because it's coming from emotions that were deep down, but are now surfacing. I hope all goes well, Manda. :D

[Havatara]

I liked it, but I thought the flow would have been better if you didn't separate it into stanzas, just had one whole chunk of writing. It may be a bit harder to read that way, but it would have made it easier to understand is maybe what I'm trying to say? I don't really know....
But I so agree with that! That happened with me with this guy in my Math class =)

[Poetic Beauty]

this poem has a nice flow to it and the emotions in this poem are conveyed nicely.

[Cassandra D.]

totally nice.

Magic. This is beautiful, showing the feelings. I love it.