Magic

He gives her magic when he talks to her. Its simply beautiful. But when he leaves her world is left depressing and dull... She doesnt know what to do with herself.

I dont know what to think
All I know is that you're something special

When I talk to you
Everything seems ok

All the emotions I felt
Wash away like sand
And suddenly I'm ok

For the few moments we talk
My world is beautiful

The birds are singing
And the sun is shining

The feeling so wonderful
It brings a smile to my face

But as soon as you leave
It all disappears

And then all the fears
And the tears
Come back to haunt me

I'm all alone
And so scared
Trying to shake away these fears

Its like for that one moment you were with me
You brought magic to my world

But when you left
You took your magic with you

And left me
And my emotions
Here...

Missing you
And your beautiful magic

Author's Note

I dont care about flow or grammar... If you dont like it or if you think it needs work please give me your advice. Dont rate unless its pretty high... trying to raise my status! Thanks

Reviews

[*Kantola*]

Oh my goodness... I absolutely loved this!!! I have no advice, except, there is a difference between "your" and "you're (you are)". "Your" is possessive, "You are" is a state of being. Just one little pet peeve of mine :) The rest was FANTASTIC!!
I know exactly how you feel. My best friend is going through something extremely similar and I have to watch her cry every moment she's away from him. It's terrible... I definitely felt those emotions of "ugh, i'm going to dread being away from him because it's going to make me sad!" :) Great job, Manda!
These pieces with a lot of emotion packed into them REALLY make me feel for the writer, because it's coming from emotions that were deep down, but are now surfacing. I hope all goes well, Manda. :D

[Chloe Christine]

again, loved it.
flow, grammar. so uneeded here..
you're amazingly talented.
nice job. 85/100. (: high enough? ^_^

[Scarlet Pulse]

A very sweet and beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading it.

[Alicante lullaby]

magical...

[LynLee]

this sounds like neverland.......because when peter pan leaves so does the magic...........i liked it........no..........i LOVED it.....

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked this. Thanks for sharing. It was good and beautiful. :)

[Wolfe Greytome]

A wonderful piece as always!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Again you don't need perfect flow cause life is not perfect... there is always someone who comes into our life that makes the world seem like a dream so when they are gone it is like hell has taken over... very nicely expressed.

[zack]

very good i like this one the most to

[deeps]

Such an emotional write. I like this it tugged on the heartstrings. Very well written

[Tina Kline]

I like this a lot. In a way its rather sad when your whole world revolves around one person but sometimes we just can't help it. I think you captured that situation very well with your words.