Everything He Does

He just takes her breathe away. He is so perfect and so unique. He makes her world go round and even though there best friends there in love.

He loves me
He loves me not
He loves me

I cant believe this is happening
I cant believe he speaks these words

Everything that he is saying
It just takes my breath away

He tells me I'm pretty
That if there was any girl to fall in love with
It would be me

He tells me about his life
And it turns out we have more things in common
Than I had thought

We both love to cook
And even sing in the shower

He is so amazing
He makes my heart skip a beat

Everything that he does
Well that also takes my breath away

He has a sense of humor
And always knows how to make me laugh

We're the best of friends
And we know everything about each other

We talk for hours about stupid things
Things nobody would understand except us

He is so perfect
And is just what I need

It's so hard being best friends
Especially when you're falling head over heels for him

That's why everything he say
And everything he does
Takes my breath away

Reviews

[bubbles]

:) i wish for this every day:) good poem. made me smile

[PaperHearts]

Very cute! I liked how light and cheerful this poem was, and I thought that you did really well in capturing the sweetness behind your words. I loved how you began the poem with the 'he loves me/he loves me not' stanza. It really set the tone of your poem, which you carried on through until the end. The only mistake that really bothered me was your misspelling of 'breath'. So 'breathe' should be 'breath'. :P
Nice poem,
~PaperHearts

[Jason]

such a beautiful display of the soul....such talent is sent from your fingertips....excellent work

[Sarah]

that reall cut and sweet good job

[Nicole]

This was so refreshing to read. :)
It made me smile, mostly because I'm no longer in a sulking mood.
Haha, this was cute. Favorited. :)
100/100

[deeps]

I really enjoyed this write I thought it was cleverly written and wonderful. Very lovely read.

[Emily]

beautiful piece. Such nice writing and great flow. This seems like it should be accompanied by a picture of you with that glowing smile on your face. What wonder it will be to feel the way and be so happy. Nice writing. The only suggestion I have is the 5th stanza second line, "And it turns out we have more things in common then I had thought"
First off, "Then" is the wrong word. Then is only used when you're talking about "then something happened" like a sequence of timing, this, then that. The word you need to use is "than" "More in common than I though."

I find the sentence itself a little long. It feels like there are a few too many beats in that sentence. You could easily say, "And it turns out, we have more in common than I though"

Very nice work. Glad to see the happiness ebbing from this poem!

[Taylor H.]

great! this is an adorable poem. Cant wait to read more from you :)

[Alicante lullaby]

amazing,cute and sooo love filled,,,and you are right,its gaah,to fall for your bestfriend,they understand you so well,

[Krazy On The Outside]

Wow, this is really sweet. I love it. Great work here. =)