Death

She was left lying there in her own blood. He left her there to die. She screams for help. He scarred her for life. He has killed so many before, so now he shall die. And end his murderous strikes.

You speak of forgiveness

Begging the court to spare your life

But what makes you think you deserve to live

After everything you put me through

And all those hopeless people

You once murdered before

I remember the day

The day I almost died because of you

I was sitting on my couch

Reading a book of some sort

When I heard my door break open

And there you stood

Pointing the gun at my chest

I remembered watching you pull the trigger

And the bullet fly right through my chest

I remember feeling so much pain

My body almost feeling like it was on fire

It was a fierce sting...

I remember watching you walk away

Feeling no fear at all

You never looked back...

You just left me there...

All alone

Leaving me to drowned in my own blood

If it werent for my crying screams for help

And the sound of the shooting gun

I would have been dead by now

I will never forgive you

For what you have done

You have scarred me for life

And I shall never be the same

You dont deserve to live

I wont let you

It just isnt fair

You murdered so many hopeless souls

Before me

No matter what you say

Now matter how much you beg

I wont ever change my mind

And you will always be a murderer

So you shall die

And suffer the pain

From all the hopeless souls you once killed

And then that shall end

The murderous strike

Author's Note

hope its ok... i just wrote this. mite need some work. tell me what you think

Reviews

[kbjami]

Okay. This is an amazing piece. So dark. Yet i'm probably being a little bias since i usually always go for dark poetry, but this was really amazing.

[Bullet Soul]

Very dark, very unforgiving. Clearly this girl faces a challenge, never able to forgive the one who has so badly wronged her. This brings a lot of questions and thoughts to mind, none of which are extremely pleasant. You traveled to a dark, scary place here, and I applaud you for that. A great read.

[Alelei]

Wow. Another amazing piece. You really portrayed a dark scenario.
Great work :)

[Jason]

Your narraration paints very dark imagery, and captures the pure essence of the direction I believe you were heading with this work. It flows beautifully, and is easy to follow. Great work, as always...

I really have to contradict one of the reviewers below, because I don't know how they get "delightful" out of this poem. ahahaha.
it's dark, and didn't need a lot of imagery, because your narration is always straight-forward.

[Scarlet Pulse]

The poem is very dark. I think you should run with the idea more. Some words are very abstract, meaning you can really create an image with the 5 senses. Find the words where you think you can create an image for the reader. It's a a good read.

[Wolfe Greytome]

Another delightful piece to read. The tone of this piece is somewhat dark, which is great.

[Sseoni]

This is a great poem! Very well written and very emotional! I love the last line! A dark, yet wonderful poem! I really liked it! :D