Not The Same

She doesnt know what happened between them. Nothing is the same though. He is never there for her. He sneaks out, and is never there to see her. He pushes her around and yells at her. But she cant take it anymore. So she is ending everything.

Shut up

Stop giving me excuses

I dont want to hear it anymore

Im sick of acting like its ok

Just stop

Stop telling me lies

And yelling at me

Its starting to make me cry

I dont know what to do with you

I dont know what happened

We used to love so well

But now...

Its not the same

You always make me cry

And push me around

Your never home

Always hanging with your stupid a*s friends

Your never there

I dont know the last time you kissed me

Or when you called to see how I was doing

Its been forever since you held me in your arms

I dont know why your doing this

Why your lying to me

But I want you to stop

Right here

Right now

Im not letting this go on any longer

So say goodbye

To everything you ever had

Because this is over

Its the end...

Author's Note

i just kinda wrote something...it mite not be good and may need some work. tell me what you think

Reviews

[Emily]

There is a lot of raw emotion here. I can see it in your words, in the flow which mimics a stream line of conscious writing. It is very good. I do not think the piece's structure or content needs work. Be careful with some of the grammar however. Sometimes we do not pay attention to it when we are writing, but it is the one thing which can never hurt a poem. No matter what you write, or how you write it, you can always correct the grammar. It makes the flow better, and helps your readers go all the way through without halting and realizing that there is a mistake. I will gladly send you a note with the corrections I'd make to the grammar, if you wish it. I am pretty new here and am finding that most people don't want a critique like that in a comment. Let me know if you would like it :-)

Wonderful writing, and I hope that things start to work themselves out.
~Emily

[Star Shyne]

Thats really sad. You're a great writer.. that was a really nice poem

[Daydreamer21]

I think there's a lot of realness in the piece and the only thing was a couple of grammar errors, which are really nothing and I'm no expert myself >.<
But I like how it's so blunt and modern and a lot of people out there can relate
Keep it up! And I hope things get better

I think that this is a powerful, forceful write, one where you just spilled your guts.

[Scarlet Pulse]

Powerful, a lot of feelings. It sounds like a dramatic monologue. There are some repeated words that you might want to change. Of course, this is just a suggestion. But I honestly feel it is full of emotion and power and its great.

[deeps]

Shut up
Stop giving me excuses
I dont want to hear it anymore
Im sick of acting like its ok
Just stop
Stop telling me lies
And yelling at me
Its starting to make me cry

Oh how I know these feelings here all to well!
This is such a powerful write here alot of raw energy.
I like this and thought it was written so very well.

[Wolfe Greytome]

I really like what happens when you just write. A delightful piece.

[Jess.]

I don't think it needs any work, I think you wrote it very well.
A ton of emotions came across, and I felt every one of them.
I like this piece.
Good write! :)

[ebur™]

i liked this poem. i felt alot of betrayal throughout and anger in a few parts, but i really liked the ending because it was like standing up for oneself. another great piece by Manda! :)