Tired Of The Pain

She just wants it to end... She is so tired of the pain... Holding back the memories... Not wanting to let go. She is afraid and all alone... Only with her shadow

Im tired

Im restless

My eyes swollen

From all the tears that have fallen

I am weak

I cant fight this alone

Everybody has disappeared

Ever since you said goodbye...

Its like my lifes in the shadows

Nobody can see me...

I am hiding away

Hiding myself under all the lies

And all the tears I cry...

I only come out in the darkness...

My past reflecting off the pictures I still have left

I keep everything locked away

Afraid to let the memories slip away...

I dont want what we had to be forgotten

Lost in a world...

It already kills me missing you

I am dying of such pain

I cant stand fighting this lost love

I cant let go of our past

Its much to hard already saying goodbye to you

I dont need to cry any more than what I already do

Im tired...

Im restless

And I just want all this suffering

To End...

Author's Note

I think its still needs work... but i wanted to see what ya'll thinked

Reviews

[Satellite Heart]

I really enjoyed reading it. I loved the whole effect. Great Work. :)

[Jason]

Brilliant expression of pain...., and it captures that most pure truth...."More of us fear being forever alone, rather to never being in love"....., maybe that is not where you wished to go with your words, but that is where I was taken....which I believe is a brilliant direction. Pain in beauty....much like a Rose Flower, with the thorn bush in the shadow, holding the thorns....

Excellent work!

Jay

[ebur™]

I liked this poem alot. I think, just as Wolfe Greytome has stated before, that the choppiness kind of add to the emotion and makes it alot stronger like you are trying to get the information through our head on how she feels. Great piece overall.

[Wolfe Greytome]

This is a wonderful piece!!!! The emotion has a very strong presence. The only issue someone might have with the piece is how it flows - somewhat choppy and discordant. However, I feel the non-smooth flow of the piece adds emphasis to the emotion behind the piece. Overall, a job well done.

[Jess.]

I like it, it's written well and the emotions are well expressed too. Good job! =)

[deeps]

Wow! So much emotion in this write i like this alot

[Elizabeth Marie O'neil-..]

i like it. it is expressive in unbelievable ways.