Broken

A boy that caused her suffering. A boy that loved her and then threw her away. He crushed hearts and her dreams. He left her alone with fear and sadness.

Every poem I ever wrote
Was about you...

How you broke me into pieces

And left me here to die

Each and everyday

I fought a battle inside

Trying so very hard
Not to cry...

Do you think it is easy for me
To just say goodbye

After everything that has happened

How do you expect me to do just that

To just go on
And forget everything...

When I have all those memories
Jumbled up inside my head

Like that first kiss of ours

On that fine summer's day

When our lips had met

For the very first time

Do you remember how it made you feel

Or even how I felt

I dreaded it to be with you

And only you

But I guess you don't remember

Because if you did

This wouldn't be happening
And you wouldn't be saying goodbye

I don't understand
Why I go on missing you

After all that you have put me through

Over and Over again
I'm frustrated because I fell
To hard for you

I believed you were the one for me
And the one to end my suffering

But its because of you
I am this way
And I know all never be the same

Because I'll always

Be broken inside

Author's Note

I cant figure out what it is... Something is missing, something not right. It just doesnt feel right. Kinda choppy... Need Help!

Reviews

[Ama May Cooper]

I loved this piece.. truthell and filled with emotion the suffering and anguish there fromthe start.
im not so keen on the endingtho the reperation of noone takes somethng away from the poem itself

[bubbles]

hmmmmm. i c what u mean......

i agree with everything the other people have said. it is brilliant and emotional. i raly felt it.

maybe u could solve the choppiness with punctuation. i know my punctuation is normally rubbish but sometimes it can help things jell better. however there is something about the 'choppiness' that i kinda like for this poem... is sotrta works. perhaps leave it as it. tampering with poems from the hart can make them loose there magic a bit.

also might just be me being stupid but i dont understand the line 'But then made it all the drear' i dont recognise what drear is, spelling error?????

[*Evelen*]

I lik this poem lots. Has so much emotion in it, and you expressed it all so well. God job!

[deeps]

Wow! This is so emotional, I really like this, you poured out feelings here.
Very well written.

[Valentin]

very emotional, well written, yes choppy, but it does come from the heart, and that can never be improved. Poems about feelings are a way to express yourself, the feelings. Brilliant.

[A]

Choppy, but smooth at the same time, but wonderfully so. (Does that even make sense? xD)

I loved the first few lines. 'Every poem I have ever written was about you...' Amazing, and the next few lines were so beautifully written and emotional it was stunning.

I'll say it again, excellent work.