Poems and Papercuts

Poems and Papercuts

A Poem by Twizzler
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xoxoxo from September/October 2009

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Poems and Papercuts

I see us slowly drifting apart
losing your face and it breaks my heart
my mind is muddy with thoughts of you
Knowing there's nothing that I can do
I stretch out my hand
but its too far a reach
... Once upon a time,
I held on like a leech.
I wanna live in your arms
I wanna scream (out), "Don't leave"
Whats the worst part of love?....
its attempt to deceive.
To make you feel secure...
and then one day dissolve.
And leave you with problems that can't be resolved.
After all that you've done- I never got to choose
So just leave me the valentine with the bruise.
Spilling the pain through my pen
So wrecked...so wrong...never again.

© 2013 Twizzler


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Good stuff thank-you...! so well put whats the worst part of love ..? its attempt to deceive .. u pretty much summed up a whole lot in 10 words .... love this site its like you peeped into how i am feeling and wrote it for me :) thats raw emotion truth right there at its finest and thats what makes incredible writing .... thank-you again

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much! Glad to know there are people connecting to what I'm feeling as well. It definite.. read more
Rayree Parker

11 Years Ago

yea.. why is that? it makes us feel a little better to know your not alone in feeling this heartache.. read more



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Love the scheme of the poem but, sounds like one sided love.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Its not easy to go through such a sad scenario and its not always easy to summerize it all in words. The flow made it easy to read and the last line really fit well and has impact. You did well on this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

Thank you again :)
Good stuff thank-you...! so well put whats the worst part of love ..? its attempt to deceive .. u pretty much summed up a whole lot in 10 words .... love this site its like you peeped into how i am feeling and wrote it for me :) thats raw emotion truth right there at its finest and thats what makes incredible writing .... thank-you again

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much! Glad to know there are people connecting to what I'm feeling as well. It definite.. read more
Rayree Parker

11 Years Ago

yea.. why is that? it makes us feel a little better to know your not alone in feeling this heartache.. read more
I love the title of this piece and also your rhyming that you used. Such wonderful imagery and raw emotions that you chooses to express to us readers. Like, you aren't afraid but wish to tell. Falling in love isn't a pretty thing anymore, not how it used to be. No more fairy tale endings or such things as "true love". We must take love and make with it what we can. We cannot control others feelings and actions, but we can definitely control our own when the time comes right.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

Thank you again for your kind words. You seem to connect to this poem and that makes me happy. To m.. read more
I Am Svetlana

11 Years Ago

Yeah, exactly! And yes, I could definitely relate to this piece and the wrenching heartache. Your wo.. read more
sad departing sorrowful heart now living apart

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well written, I really enjoyed reading this. Good job

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words and for reading.
I enjoyed reading the emotions in your write in a lovely rhyme scheme...and Love sucks...overall, poignant.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

Yeah, It sure can. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Everett DeValle

11 Years Ago

You are very welcome, Twizzler.

~Ev
There is something nice and natural about your rhymes, even though they're obvious. I liked this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

I appreciate your comment. Thank you.
Full of amazing emotion,
like the rhyme scheme.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

That is so nice to hear. Thank you!
Ah, "never again"...famous last words ;-)

I'm not the world's biggest fan of the rhyming poem, but this one was pretty good...the rhymes didn't feel forced. And props for managing to use the word "leech" in a piece without making me shudder *laugh* It was a really good analogy, powerful. Thanks for sharing your work with us.

-kimmer

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Twizzler

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the support. I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
KAOlmsted

11 Years Ago

It's my pleasure.

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