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A Poem by Rachel

She opens her eyes
She sees a world that she thought would be full of corruption Instead she sees smiling faces.
So much happiness
She wonder why she feels so out of place
She walks through the beautiful field of flowers
She's now in a crowded room
So why does she feel so lonely
The room is spinning around her
She is falling into insanity

© 2017 Rachel


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I think you may have meaned corruption and not corrupt, but a good piece. I like this one mainly for those juxtaposing images of the flowers and then the crowded room. Well done! :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The real question is why is she falling into insanity. Who'd ever thought personal disbelief could become such a beckoning experience. Nice work. An intriguing write and read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice job capturing the feeling of being alone, when there are people all around.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel

11 Years Ago

thank you.

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Rachel

Weston, WV



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My name is Melinda, but my friends that have been in my life longer than my other friends call me Rachlel, but we spell it RACHLE. I blow out the candles on June 17. I'm a song, poetry, & story writ.. more..

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