Maleficent

 

You don’t know me.

Woman in the shadows

Character unknown

Face unseen

Voice unheard

 

Never even met

Yet your corrosive lies

Burn into my life

Blistering the core

Of who I am

 

My persona, fabricated

To suit your needs

Synthesising thoughts

With slanderous slant

Poisoning minds

 

Puppeteer of emotions

Creating a show

Powerless marionette

Being manipulated

By your strings of deceit

 

I can look in the mirror

And see a true reflection

Knowing who I see

Happy in my skin

Can you say the same?

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

Interesting poem really because you open with never seen never known never heard, that being the case, from there in I can only draw an assumption that the same applies in reverse, that you don�t know that person at all, never seen, never known never heard.
Yes somehow, you know about corrosive lies, it doesn�t really make sense to me, I would think its hard to lie about a person you don�t now, because you would only be saying anything at all on the basis of shallow perception, on shallow details, or even just out of intuition.
You kind of support that when you move though to �fabricated persona� I can only speak form experience here, but people fabricate other peoples persona all the time based on minimal building blocks, some times for their own needs, but mostly I�d say simply out of the basic need to know other people, one can only work with the information they have, and only assume it to be true there are no guarantees more often than not the information is true, then a perception is built, most people seem to be off the mark when attempting to outline another person, not every one portrays who they feel they are inside. And many times people will appear different to different people, its not necessarily deceit, it�s a different person to person understanding and interaction because the interaction is simply allowed to be different between different people. Ahg I don�t think I�m making a great deal of sense here sorry.
There are so many facets to an individual, I�m sure most people are happy with all of them, and each facet although different is often still very true.
And its likly there are a whole lot more other diferences in an individual that can make a person swing and say, thats not the person I know, yet it most likely is, just a portion you never knew thats all.

[Gandré]

oh well this was well done! Poetic and deep, I truly loved it. You are right. This poem suits to everyone.

[Bubo]

I am very glad to come and read this today when my own life is surround by someone who continues to lie about me, and the end makes perfect peaceful sense, no matter what the hurt caused, we know when we look in the mirror the truth, and that is what matters.

Yet I can look in the mirror
And see a true reflection
Knowing who I see
Happy in my skin
Can you say the same?

A very strong and emotional write.

[Emily B]

This has a clear voice, the words follow in reasonable succession. It's pointed and really very good!

[Silvia - Scribo, Ergo S..]

Very consistent, purposeful play around the themes deceipt, deception, masks, facades - emotional and otherwise ... Particularly like the crescendo of the last stanza. Highly enjoyable read! xxx

[Benarsi]

Puppeteer of emotions
Creating a show
Powerless marionette
Being manipulated
By your strings of deceit

Wow...You've used wonderful wording here, and showed us a lot of emotions...A well-crafted, thought-provoking and poigant piece. Your ending was especially captivating "Can you say the same?" I haven't seen many poems ended in a question mark, and that added an interesting element to the conclusion...Fascinating...An exquisite poem, thanks for sharing :)

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[Fabian G. Franklin]

I thought this was a well crafted piece because of the logical progression of the poem and the wording used to express what you had to say. I really like "powerless marionette being manipulated by your strings of deceit" excellent! This poem is the basis for a fallacy in logic known as "poisoning the well" like when two political candidates rise and one says of the other, "whatever my opponent is about to say, I can guarantee it is a lie." NONSENSE! How can he guarantee the untruth of what has not yet been spoken? That is how I saw this and thought your representation was just right on the spot.

[Helen Woodward]

Is this to do with what's going on around here at the moment?