Pools

If our love was so strong,

Why, then, so quickly,

did you begin swimming

in another’s heart?

How can you flourish in her’s,

When you are still dripping

with mine?

Reviews

[Clockwork]

That is always a hard question to answer, especially when it seems that those we love enjoy it in our waters. I could see this one being sent in a letter...maybe in a modern sense, text-messaged to the person in question here. I sort of like the idea of the heart as an ocean or a swimming pool, and how those we love swim though the waves. I hope that there were answers to meet those very tough questions. Well done here.

[Molly Garnet]

Wow, the images you provoked in this are really beautiful.

[Vikrantsingh]

Bravo! *Claps*
Such a wonderful/small and beautifully narrated by friend :)
- Singh :)

[Mike Cole]

A lot of people know just exactly how you are feeling. Heartbreak is a natural part of life and something that we will never be able to avoid. But my goal is that a lot of people learn to avoid those people who will "go swimming in another's heart"

[DJ]

Wow, powerful and thought provoking read. A hard question indeed, but I think for me personally, the answer would be because the person didn't truly love me and doesn't deserve me.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Poetry needn't read verse, after verse, after verse...this is stunning and quite lovely!

Working two jobs, plus being a student, must leave little time for the poet in you. I wish you the best, for I believe you've found your voice, right here!

My best,
Kelly

[Robyn]

Short, yet very deep! Very nicely done!

[Angi]

The imagery is really sharp here. I like the swimming metaphor. I don't understand how people jump from pool to pool so easily. The terrain between them was always too hard to climb. I know my own pool very well. Only one holds the key to that locked tight gate. Nicely done! Angi~

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wow! Short and to the point with awesome imagery! I love the swimming/water metaphor. I am going to RR this to my friends.