So Sick of Rhyming Poems

        So sick of rhyming poems

The Haiku's five - seven - five syllables
The Limerick's aabba rhyme scheme

        So sick of red Roses

The yellow of Tulips
The Daisy's beautiful white petals

        So sick of Apples

The tart and tangy Orange
The sweet and juicy Watermelon

        So sick of Sunsets

The pretty purple sky at Sunset
The yummy yellow and orange sky at Sunrise

        So sick of lush Fields

The flourishing leave on Maples
The budding flowers of the Magnolias

        So sick of the victoria secret Models

The slender waist of the Ladies
The well-defined abs of the Fellas

         So sick of Blonde hair

The darkness of Black hair
The heat of Red hair

So sick of the norm
The way things has always been
The expected...

 

Reviews

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Cliche can be overdone to often. We as writers should always strive to break out of the norm. Take something cliche and add a twist to it, give it something new and fresh. One edit, in your second to last line, has should be have. Okay two edits, if the line does not start a new sentence, don't capitalize it. That's a bit cliche for poets and it's grammatically incorrect.

I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

Blessings, Tammy

[Destiny]

Very creative... I like it!

[r. f. jordan]

this is interesting work that reflects deep passion from the place of the speaker to the environment of the reader. what i struggle with sometimes is whether being sick of the norm has become a part of the norm. regardless, this is good work.