So Sick of Rhyming Poems

        So sick of rhyming poems

The Haiku's five - seven - five syllables
The Limerick's aabba rhyme scheme

        So sick of red Roses

The yellow of Tulips
The Daisy's beautiful white petals

        So sick of Apples

The tart and tangy Orange
The sweet and juicy Watermelon

        So sick of Sunsets

The pretty purple sky at Sunset
The yummy yellow and orange sky at Sunrise

        So sick of lush Fields

The flourishing leave on Maples
The budding flowers of the Magnolias

        So sick of the victoria secret Models

The slender waist of the Ladies
The well-defined abs of the Fellas

         So sick of Blonde hair

The darkness of Black hair
The heat of Red hair

So sick of the norm
The way things has always been
The expected...

 

Reviews

[.....]

Cliche can be overdone to often. We as writers should always strive to break out of the norm. Take something cliche and add a twist to it, give it something new and fresh. One edit, in your second to last line, has should be have. Okay two edits, if the line does not start a new sentence, don't capitalize it. That's a bit cliche for poets and it's grammatically incorrect.

I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

Blessings, Tammy

[Sethnicity]

I must Whole heatedly agree
and then remember that without them there would be only me.... the norm.
The repetition in this is brilliant and worthy of a read request.
I am an admitted slave to the beat I whittle rhyme and meter like old men wag tongues while walking on the street. None the less F**k the beat-down and say somethin new. A challenge to myself and all those other who, recycle lines and metaphors, But Damn.. did you have to attack Victoria's W****s!? :)
j/k great write. You have passion and fire as well as a smirking grin I'll stop by and check you out again!
Perfection!

"I wanted to destroy something Beautiful..." - Tyler Durden

[Ascending]

Appreciate that man!

[Khal Attero]

Hungry for more of your writing. Excellente!

[Shy Girl]

Nailed it very well. I can't say much about it though..seeing as I rhyme now and again..lol So I'll just say that you covered almost every basic topic there..lol :)

[Mark]

Well I'm always glad to see poets who don't need rhyming.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is always the option of a writer to write as they feel unless in a class that demand discipline and rules. I like the set-up of this poem. Thank you for the entertaining poetry.
Coyote

[reflectingus]

Haha, I really like this. Sometimes, we crave change, tend to push ourselves in a new direction, away from the same things. And there is so much in life that we haven't yet explored, it gets me excited, and I could certainly relate to your feelings elicited in this poem. The flow was brilliant, enjoyed reading.

[schnickythep]

Everyone puts too much stock in the norms so they don't realize there are so many better things. This poem really captures that without being too angry. Very nice job!

[Bare trees]

I've just re-posted one about roses hahahahaha And yet I know how you feel. I've done my share of moon poems and all the overly done cliche themes and I'm surprised you didn't mention the broken-heart poems I see on a daily basis.

Good and valid rant.

[Southern Cross]

This one made me giggle ..How often do we all feel this way?? Aah, I know I have my days. Damn it all...l especially those Victoria Secret models !!!!

[Ascending]

Yes, those darn models!