I think this is an amazing piece of writing, Shawn. Filled with innovative imagery and a delicate touch on the pen/keyboard to bring the ideas to imaginative life.
And I choke on words that chirp like birds
And sing like sentences
Pretenses of blue
In a sky of sad
But at least I don’t gag
On the silence anymore.... Exceptional and inspirational.
Ok, well I;ll be honest, I'm not the best poet, or reviewer, but this poem spoke volumes to me. I got it...I get the words, and the imagery, and I love the repetition you used here....so for me that makes a great poem.....:)
Thanks for sharing, and I hope you get more writers block if this is what you end up producing....:)
and the god looked at what 'he' had done and said, 'it's better than nothing', but i say call ed's tip of the neck service for quick and efficient repair...
oh god what an open!!!! "I don’t gag much
On the silence anymore" - love that - straight from the Book of Shawn lol! silky word plays - bind of my mind - so much going on here - brilliant descriptives throughout - I'll just end up reciting the whole poem if I were to quote favourite lines - and this is FAR, FAR from mediocre so stop that nonsense - I don't think you could do mediocre if you tried - "And I choke on words that chirp like birds
And sing like sentences" - so poetic - and "To stand on the wind and eat solstice again
With my heart tied around my eyes" - going into my favourites now - love the repetition at the end too to resolve it somewhat - but it doesn't have a clean circular end it's more ouroboric and self-consuming which I like! nice!
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