Pretend

 

 

These trouble times

Release ah pain inside

Dull in by lies

Cooked up by our kind

 

An illness stills

Stream across my eyes

Peirce an inch of my cries  

All a game, a damn shame

To believe a friend in need

 

These pretend rhymes

Destroy ah child fairy tale mind

Factoring “Sleeping Beauty” kiss

With Barbie doll parents to dismissed

A real chance of happiness

 

An illness calms

Ripples along my palm

Surgically removes my appearance

With a pretend look-a-like

Drill through my existences

With make-believe characters  

 

A princess paints

These precious lives

Fence in by “Pinocchio” lies

Pretending to be

Something, someone

That could never be

Anything else but

Pretend

 

Author's Note

A different side of me. ;) Hope you like this!

Reviews

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

An illness calms
Ripples along my palm
Surgically removes my appearance
With a pretend look-a-like
Drill through my existences
With make-believe characters

This is very different from what I'm use to. I find myself constantly repeating myself when reviewing your work, but I will say that I'm proud of you showing different sides and styles. They fit you very well!

I love the above stanza, and all of it flowed very well together! Good pen......

[Dionysus Cain]

this is a awesome write. it moves well, it read well and it doesn't ever fall off. again geat write.........

[Dionysus Cain]

this is a awesome write. it moves well, it read well and it doesn't ever fall off. again geat write.........

[These Haunted Hallways]

Another extraordinary write, love :) This IS a different one from u...and i really liked it. I think this may have two sides to it as well. One, maybe our childhood dreams and fantasies; people putting things into our heads to make us believe things that arent real, but we wished it were real. And two, in our adult lives; we tend to fib a little bit just to get through the day, and to get thru some weird or tuff obstacles in life hehe. But the main thing is that we must try to be true to ourselves, hope for the best, take life as it comes at us, hope that people will accept us for who we are, and try to live each day to the fullest, i guess. It's hard, i know, but we gotta try a little bit. Fantastic write hun, really great job with expression. This really made perfect sense :)

B.A.