Dockyard, unscrupulous, a marine
dockyard unscrupulous, a marine.
Obsession for what did I fail?
Grow these ropes from hemp.
Marine, did I fail?What for?
A dockyard unscrupulous obsession.
Doctors, I beg off your power
doctors I beg off your power;
Often enough pine needles fall,
Continuous Pledges blinding
Enough doctors beg often pine
Needles fall, I power you’re off..
Thrice loafers had I walked away;
thrice loafers had I walking, a way.
Entering though the open doors,
Then malice making a sour list.
Doors had. I threw away loafers.
Open thrice walking, the entering.
Loafers feel unscrupulous, dockyard
lovers fail, unscrupulous dockyards.
Open doors for your marrying doctors;
What power! Did big needles enter
the ring of power, a-walking often
through rice? I shun the way, obsess.
The paradelle is a four stanza poem, each stanza consists of 6 lines, for the 1st 3 stanzas, the 1st and 2nd lines should be the same, the 5th & 6th should be composed of all the words from the 1st &3rd lines and only the words from the 1st & 3rd lines. The final stanza should be composed of all the words in the 5th & 6th lines of the 1st three stanzas.
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nice poetic form...thank you for sharing...we can learn art from your writings... :) I love the second last stanza
Thrice loafers had I walked away;
thrice loafers had I walking, a way.
Entering though the open doors,
Then malice making a sour list.
Doors had. I threw away loafers.
Open thrice walking, the entering
thanks, scarlet azalea, it was a weird form to try out, a fun game of a form, I don't know if I will.. read morethanks, scarlet azalea, it was a weird form to try out, a fun game of a form, I don't know if I will be able to write another Paradelle and when but it is one of the new american verse forms created in the past I think 20 years or so I read somewhere, I have no idea if it is accurate, but I find it a little bit challenging but also enjoyable of a poetic form
9 Years Ago
ya, write more of these kinds of writing. Oh so these kind of writing are called Paradelle. Impressi.. read moreya, write more of these kinds of writing. Oh so these kind of writing are called Paradelle. Impressive!!
"Doctors, I beg off your power
doctors I beg off your power;
Often enough pine needles fall,
Continuous Pledges blinding
Enough doctors beg often pine
Needles fall, I power you’re off.."
I love your use of repetition, it really makes a powerful statement.
Great poem! It is clear you have been writing for a long time, keep it up!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thanks, there are some spelling changes I feel, I've never tried on this poetic form for size as it .. read morethanks, there are some spelling changes I feel, I've never tried on this poetic form for size as it were, there really are some strange glitches in it but it was a learning experience to write it, there might be some good lines.