Rip Off!

It is my little poke of fun at the beat poetry of the 60's

               Rip Off

 

Nicck-knack Kerouac give the crowd a bone.

Drink your mocha latte with biscotti or a scone.

Beat those bongos daddy to a mellow soothin' tone.

Tryin' to swim in heavy water?

Now you're sinkin' like a stone.

Spoutin dis-conn-ected nonsence

And you'll go home alone.

No originality , no vision or a style of your own.

Just a nasty reputation as a Kerouacin' clone!

Author's Note

I would like any help with the spelling I can get. However remember that I have purposely dropped the g from all words with the ing suffix for affect.

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

Since you asked for spelling help "bongoes" should be "bongos" and "origonality" should be "originality," that said I really wouldn't have noticed these spelling errors if you hadn't asked for help. I just liked the poem as is. It worked because of it being written in beat style and I really did enjoy the playfulness of this piece.

[Margaret Barton-Wahl]

Thanks so very much. Spelling is not one of my strong suits. Bright Blessings...~M~

[Margaret Barton-Wahl]

I would like to make this abundantly clear..."I am not making fun of Jack Kerouac!" I am making fun of the hundreds of people who tried to imitate him and did it so poorly! One should do more than copy an original thinker one needs to BE an original thinker to pay homage to a Poet of his stature.

[Inda]

This is great! I don't know how you could improve it, it looks flawless to me.

[serpent]

ahh!!! I am glad that i bumped into this piece..beat has always been my area of interest..the only problem is that i failed at writing in the genre of geniuses. the piece is pretty witty..or shall i say..passionate..yea..passionate is a little more precise..has also got that touch of 60s to it...
a nice attpemt! sucessful indeed!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

strokes my goatee, adjusts my oh-so-cool sunglasses, pulls at the neck of my black turtleneck shirt and c***s my beret to one side.... and what was wrong with the beat poets?

[Last Lying Look]

I like this.
It's catchy.
Really great write!!
-Elissa

[JohnL]

Love it. It really takes the Micky (do you have that phrase where you are or is it British). And how true it all is about that which you speak.
I got a real lift out of the last line. Kerouacin' makes a wonderful expletive; have you, I wonder made a new addition to the world of bad language? Discuss.

[THE LOST ROSE]

Love this write. There is so much passion in this piece. I can relate to a particular era but the flow of this poem warrants for more of it. I enjoyed this piece and I will be back to read some more of your fantastic work.

[Michael X]

Margaret, this is humorous and flows with the beat of the sixies, its truly jive, and carries, the passionate meaning and tone gives the reader a strong impression of what beat poetry is, as such, is capturing with the notion of grove and hip writing that takes the reader back in time, fun and exceptionally colorful.
The abstract quality accentuates the intent nicely. Nickknack* bongos* nonsense* originality* ..effect*

[Ravenskald]

This brings up some interesting questions about what poetry writing and for that matter art is ...
Rap, popular music lyrics, both forms of poetry (whether you like the content is aesthetics ;) )
Some interesting thoughts , and parody is a good way of bursting pretention ;-)

~Raven