Breathe

A darkness is swallowing me
Gnawing away my flesh
This hollowness is killing me
And in hopelessness
                                  I gasp for breath.

Author's Note

Sorry for not posting in so long... Please tell me what you think. :)

Reviews

[Sahara Mist]

Breathtakingly beautiful. I miss reading your words.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks. :) I'm going to try to post more often... I've been super busy lately. >.< I plan to add a few more poems this week, and maybe a short story in my book. ^_^

[Fréyjä Helv..]

For a short piece, it does says a lot... Intense dark emotions pour in heavily in these few lines... Brilliant write...

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you. :)

[Nick.B]

Such a raw piece, felt the dark emotion, where there's no hope, just the desire of survival, and then the feeling of nothing will ever happened, just a downfall into darkness, great job

[InsanityWriter]

I'm so glad I was able to evoke such powerful emotions! As a poet, that's what I strive for. :D
read moreI'm so glad I was able to evoke such powerful emotions! As a poet, that's what I strive for. :D
Thank you so much for your review!! I truly appreciate it. (:

[Salar Majak]

nice come back, i like the rough emotion, the anger and misery shows in a scary way, beautiful

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you so much for reading!! (:

[chaotic katie]

I like it. Short and sweet, yet so powerful with emotion. Nice job!

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading Katie. :)