Breathe

A darkness is swallowing me
Gnawing away my flesh
This hollowness is killing me
And in hopelessness
                                  I gasp for breath.

Author's Note

Sorry for not posting in so long... Please tell me what you think. :)

Reviews

[DarkRainbowPie]

Short and...well, I can't really say sweet, haha, it packed a punch. Nicely written :)

[Carly]

It's so quick, but packs such a blow. And it's one of those things you just read over and over again, finding something new every time.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks Carly. :) I'm glad it made an impression!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

painful and strong...well penned

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you. :)

[Clove]

It's fine. I bet you were busy, probably. Anyway this one is very interesting I like how you used certain phrases in these words to describe gasping for breath. It sounds like your trying to say that you have given up on hope or something is bugging you or killing you from the inside out.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading. ^_^ I'm glad you thought it was good. :)

[Forgiven]

So deep to be so short. There is a ton of meaning and expression behind this. It's like trying to keep your head above water. I love it. Great job!

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for your kind review. I truly appreciate it! :)

[Frieda P]

I like this one a lot Skittles, I could feel the breathlessness in the hopless feelings of it all, as if life is going to be swallowed whole...keep breathing my friend :-)

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks so much Frieda!! :)

[Frieda P]

My pleasure, you're on my book shelf now :-)

[InsanityWriter]

Wow!! It's an honor! ;)

[MoriartyMesa]

this reminds me of when you might swim in wild waters of Mexico, anything can grab you and pull you under. And the words did just that.

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for reading!! :D

[Inspiring Writer]

Ok, let me tell you now what i thought about it :)
i see here you reality even everyone's reality tthat reflects from a mirror of a poem thats' well penn'd and made by your scent. Nice write, I appreciate your this poem much than my writes because, here i can feel.. i can understand the meaning of every word, of every line in your this short piece. You didn't drop here a piece or a write or a poem but "A Honest And A Deep Truth Of The Life" :)

Your Rhyme's one of the main thing i think that's flatter me now towards you... Ohh, i meant towards your writings.. lol to read some more :)

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you so much for your kind review, Inspiring. :) I truly appreciate your feedback!

[Inspiring Writer]

Your welcome! :)
well, it's youse writing's re "Insanity" which're attracting me towards their depth of words reading some more and more and visit on your profile too to read.
You've a deep faith i think of writings..so, don't give up, keep writing and posting :)

[Jack...]

So smooth and rythmic is your poem this day my good friend. Like a song, it played in my head. Really nice rhyme and perfect is size and message. You do create visions with your words

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you so much for reading Jack. :) I always look forward to your reviews!

[Lamis]

Your rhyming is always perfect, I noticed that. I do love how in brief lines you pull us into your poem and now we're to catch our breath too!

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you!! :) I was hoping to have the effect of the reader having to take a breath. :D