Picnic

Who wants to go?

Julie Radovich and Nick Parker arrived at the meadow at 7:20 pm. It was a Friday night in August, and it was going to be a romantic picnic...

Or so Nick had thought.

Things had started out well, he had picked her up and driven her there in his car. Julie had brought red wine and homemade cherry pie, while Nick had brought a salad and chicken. They sat down to eat and watch the remainder of the sunset, and they chatted casually in the fading light. Then, things spiraled downwards as Nick cut himself a piece of that cherry pie.

“Nick,” Julie had said suddenly, her voice strangely sinister, “you know Saundra Barley, don’t you.” It was not a question, and Nick was confused. Julie had mentioned her roommate to him before, but he never thought she knew… So he said no.

“Oh, well that’s funny,” Julie replied, voice humorless, “because she was going on and on about how she and a certain ‘Nick Parker’ were going to go out for dinner Saturday. Is there any relation?” She snarled. Nick swallowed. He hadn’t thought Saundra would tell Julie... He knew he was in for it, he just didn’t realize ‘it’ meant a bullet to the back of his head.

Things escalated quickly as Julie shrieked to high heaven about how Nick had ‘used her’ and how she must mean so little to him. Nick was going to say sorry, and he actually kind of was, but Julie had started walking away, and before he could turn around to tell her to ‘stop’, and to reassure her that he really did care for her, she pulled out a Glock 22 from her purse, and fired into the back of Nick Parker’s skull. As the body fell down, staining the light blue picnic blanket red, Julie Redovich stormed away and drove out of there, like a bat outta hell, in Nick’s car.

So much for her and Saundra being friends…

Author's Note

Let me know what you think!! :) Thank you for reading. ^_^

Reviews

[Horizon K.]

Oh, very morbid. I think this is s good start but could be improved a bit. The surprise was gone because you tell us in advance that things are going to essentially end up this way, and more emotion/ tension build could be added, especially in her attitude towards him throughout the evening. Very fun read though! I'm enjoying these little "chapters"
Of yours:)

[InsanityWriter]

I'm glad you enjoy them! And don't worry, I know they all need polishing up... I'm a procrastonater though, so I'll do that 'later'... When I have time, I've got a billion other things going on too. XD Thanks for reading. (:

[Firefly]

I loved the ending, and this a lovely feeling to it, like the theme is quite dark, but in itself, the story is very.....warm, and i cant't explain it, but well done! :D

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading!! ^_^ I'm so happy you like my work. :D

[CreativeStroke]

Well I certainly would never ever go on a picnic with her! This was a descriptive story and I liked the idea behind it. I would recommend not saying in your description of the story that things go downhill. That way your reader doesn't know that up front and can follow along with the story better. :)
I love how easy your writing is to read and follow along to. It makes your stories enjoyable and entertaining. Another great little story you have here. :)

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for reading. ^_^ I really appreciate your input. :)

[chaotic katie]

i loved it very twisted especially at the end guess karma got that guy lol great job!

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for your review! I'm glad you liked it. ^_^

[Jack...]

Remind me never to go unarmed on a picnic with Julie. Wow she was mad! very cool.

[InsanityWriter]

XD Thank you for reading, it's always great to get reviews from you Jack. ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha, I don't know if I should laugh or cry, that'll learn him....wasn't expecting that at all! Good read, much enjoyed with my morning coffee, well, til the bloody part anyway! ;-)

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks! :) I'm glad you liked it. (;