Take Me

Bring me home to God in Heaven,
To where eternal resting lies--
Above the world, no longer broken,
Sleeping safely in the skies.

So now in this chanting sorrow,
In these tears which I abide,
Nevermore shall be tomorrow,
With the aid of suicide.

Grant me now a courage waiting
To stay and live upon this earth.
But what now is the point of living,
If I've not here since my birth?

Author's Note

Haven't posted a poem in a while... I hope you enjoyed!

Reviews

[DarkRainbowPie]

My favourite piece of your work so far. Nicely penned. Strong words, though few. Well done :)

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you so much. :)

[Rahul]

last stanza's good, nicely penned, i liked this poem, it showed some kinda reality. The flow of ink was great and words're powerful as well.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks. ^_^

[Rocans]

Good write! I enjoyed this penning indeed. I was impressed by the cadence of this, flowing rhythmically from line to line. Good work.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks. :) I'm glad you liked it. ^_^

[Fréyjä Helv..]

It's very simple yet sincerely written. I love the rhymes and meter that worked out well in this poem. beautiful write..

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks. ^_^

[Forgiven]

So dark yet peaceful at the same time... love it! You did an amazing job.... def a God given gift :)

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you so much for reading. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Boy of the red]

very nice! i had to read the last line a few times but its great :) i hope you never go my friend. great write.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading. ^_^ I'm glad you liked it!! :D

[Boy of the red]

ive liked everything i have read from you :)

[The Girl That Let You G..]

Very lovely piece. Dark subject, yet words of light, lol, love this write :)

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for reading. (:

[Firefly]

i really enjoyed this, the subject is brilliantly expanded on throughout, i like it ^_^

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks. :D

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A beautiful piece...perhaps a fallen angel, or just a person dreaming of escape. Either way, you have painted an interesting picture of a very mournful subject. Feeling as though you are out of options is a dark place to be; this portrays that "beautiful release" quite well. Suicide has been written about many a time, but this one is unique. Too bad with suicide the ones who suffer the most are those left behind.

One little thing: the last line is off I think "If I've not (been) here since my birth?"

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for reading. ^_^ I'm glad you liked it!

[Peter H]

Grant me now a courage waiting
To stay and live upon this earth.
But what now is the point of living,
If I've not here since my birth?

the last line might need some work , but over all its a good poem. i can get what you were trying to convey its an alright write .

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading. :) I appreciate your review!