After a Fight

Comfort food
Comfort place
Leave me alone
Give me space.

I can't calm down
If you are here
So I hide away
Until you're not near.

Author's Note

This is actually about me and my mom, we don't always get along well...

Reviews

[Ban Heo]

this is great. I love how naturally this poem rhymes in the first stanza. The only thing I dislike about the last one is how out of place "until you're not near" seems to be. There is a very comforting, yet sad rejection and I feel like that last line gives it away too much. Maybe something more like "So I hide away / with comforting tears."

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for the review. :)

[sirenribbon@thehptshirt..]

A very clear poem. I can relate! Cheers

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for reading and reviewing. ^_^ I'm glad you liked it!! :)

[Alice Locke]

This is a really good poem... it's, like, simple but it's true. I can relate.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading. :) I'm glad you liked it!! ^_^

[Tex]

great write, simple, direct, clear voice. so few words but so powerful. i think every reader can relate to this write... how often can that be said of a write... well done.

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for reading! ^_^

[Andie]

After a fight we all need our time to cool down. This poem was very nice. :)

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks. (:

[Andie]

No problem. :)

[KeeD]

Short, sweet and simple, you described your own personal life in such a creative, beautiful manner. Every kid out there can relate to this and its an easy read. Good pen on ya' great stuff. xox

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[KeeD]

Anytime, Love entertaining talented young writers. kudos.

[kimmy]

This was a great poem :) I didn't get along with my mom and when I got older we still didn't get along to much better, but just love your mom and try to get along. I lost my mom this July and I wish I could have told her how much I loved her, but we were not talking at the time:(

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for your review. I'm sorry about your loss. :(

[kimmy]

Thank you so much:)

[RachelReaper]

man, do i know how this feels... when you just want to be left alone and all of the sudden it feels like everyone wants to talk... ugh! this poem was simple and very easy to relate to, very nice work.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reviewing!

[RachelReaper]

anytime :)

[C.C. Marx]

Sometimes you just need time to yourself, ti cool down and relax, I personally sit in my room and blast music or write great piece

[InsanityWriter]

I like to eat food... Preferably chocolate. XD Then I sit someplace and let insanity rain upon me. ;)

[C.C. Marx]

Chocolate is the best recovery food lol and my sitting place would be the corner in my bedroom hidden from eye sight

[Patrick Henry]

Many a day I found myself with my face buried in the shadowy parts of my room blasting White Zombie on my concert speakers. I had this picture in my head of you with your face pressed to the window's cool interior, just watching the rain fall outside. I like it..... xoxo -Mark

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reviewing. :) I personally like listening to Thomas Bergersen to caml down.... And eat a lot of chocolate in someplace quiet and dark. XD Thank you so much for reading!!!

[Patrick Henry]

I don't know that name, but a few friends have told me that on here so far. : ) Try a little Gn'R ballads or the song by Faster Pussycat, called "House of Pain". I spent a lot of time in my head when I was little, and this song kinda explained it for me, to me. My heart goes out to you in many of your poems. *hugs* xoxo -Mark

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks. ^_^