After a Fight

Comfort food
Comfort place
Leave me alone
Give me space.

I can't calm down
If you are here
So I hide away
Until you're not near.

Author's Note

This is actually about me and my mom, we don't always get along well...

Reviews

[Ban Heo]

this is great. I love how naturally this poem rhymes in the first stanza. The only thing I dislike about the last one is how out of place "until you're not near" seems to be. There is a very comforting, yet sad rejection and I feel like that last line gives it away too much. Maybe something more like "So I hide away / with comforting tears."

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for the review. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is simple, concise and yet still packed with quite a bit of emotion. So often we see these types of interactions between people, and then usually end up the same way...self destruction. I think this was pretty well done; didn't need a lot of imagery or overwrought articulation to get the point across. Well done.

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for reading. I'm glad you liked it. (:

[Shadey Jadey]

Short and sweet. Very nice :)

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks! :)

[Boy of the red]

This is a great and simple. We always need to get away for a while. Get lost in yourself for while. Good write

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading. :)

[Jaxdad]

Parents can be like that. Nice wording

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks for reading. :)

[Julie Wolfe]

I love this poem and can relate to it lots and i think a lot of people can relate to it. Great job. :)

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you. :) I'm happy you like it!! ^_^

[Frieda P]

Solitude can be a very good thing...ha, you and your mom, I remember it well! Nice one Skittles.

[InsanityWriter]

Thanks bunches for reading!! ^_^

[Acer]

loved it indeed, loved your starting...Comfort food
Comfort place
Leave me alone
Give me space.
nice stanza, i love to read or write short poems, very nice...beautiful.

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you for reading. :)

[Acer]

you're welcome, but it was really nice ;-')

[Inda]

Refuge into oneself, sometimes it helps.

[InsanityWriter]

Yup. :) Thanks for reading!!

[Seanh12]

This is great I love it. Well written. I love your work.

[InsanityWriter]

Thank you. ^_^ I appreciate you reading!! :)

[Seanh12]

its ok no problem

[nostal]

Not to be meddlesome, but why?

[InsanityWriter]

We just don't get along most of the time. :/ We're both also passive aggressive... :P Thanks for reading!!