Be still my heart (Re-write)

Taking a long look at myself once upon a time

As I sit by the lamps soft dim glow
Pen in hand, thoughts lazy
I recollect on all I've done
Wished.

My mind passes across memories
Of days gone by, slowly moving
Like a rivers soft current making
Ripples in the cool clear stream.

And I dream..

I feel the warmth of the sunlight
Touching my upturned face
My body as I lie in splendor
Upon the soft green grass.

Clouds pass by me slowly
Their forms different, pictures
Forming for my eyes alone to see
Feel their soft tender touch.

Eyes closed I go within myself
To a time of innocence, gaiety
A lifetime of once upon a time
Of childhoods laughter and hopes.

So quickly they speed by my eyes
Hazy shadows hidden till now
Flicker like a candle growing dim
Grasping, I hold onto them with all my will.

For regrets hold no place in my thoughts
Nor pain shall stay within my heart
Forgiveness comes, then sets itself free
Towards the soft breeze gently touching me.

Life, as such, brings me to where I am now
My accomplishments as such, needed moments
Of who I am, want to be, and where I have gone
All cherished in its own special way.

As the sun warms me, I lie in wait
My fate already sealed in the hands of above
And I can't help but send forth a small smile
For what is given to me, choices I have made.

For today I am here
This moment I have embraced
Time has erased all hurts done by others
And the pain slowly ebbs away.

On the breeze of the angels
I set them free
Towards the winds of time
I lie in splendor and hope.

And softly a tear forms
And slowly trickles down
I look towards the sky
And whisper softly..

Finally... Peace..

Be still my heart..



Copyright © 2010 MoonStar Rose AKA Magdelena

 

Reviews

[Ladysue]

This is so soft and lovely. it has a warm and wonderful flow. Great descriptions...truly a beautiful piece of writing...

[A]

This is just perfect!I don't how else to give it a fair description, I truly enjoyed reading this, the title caught my eye and the whole poem has a special charm since you can visualize everything due to your talented write, keep it up!
"
For today I am here
This moment I have embraced
Time has erased all hurts done by others
And the pain slowly ebbs away."

[Dinesh Sairam]

"And softly a tear forms
And slowly trickles down
I look towards the sky
And whisper softly.."

Ah, sweet cliche! And I love the simplicity of the wordings too. Just that, (as I always mutter), a metric revision could help. A beauty of a poem this. Keep writing.

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I really enjoyed watching the picture you painted here "like a tapestry unfurl"
the scene you have so skillfully produced with your words is one of bright colors and a magnificent vista. I have, in the past enjoyed your work and look forward to deriving much more pleasure from your future endevors----
You make the language sing!
But you know---- well see my PM

[Rossen]

This is tooo good to be free
ebbs good word..."And the pain slowly ebbs away". the simple words are the most powerful,they can go places big fancy words only dream about!

Rossen