The days of once-upon-a-time....

I sit and think on all I've done

My life, my family, my dreams

Hopes of a young girl long ago

When she danced alone in the rain

While darkness fell over her form

As the stars smiled down gleaming

So much, too fast, too late

Is all I say now, as I sit and stare

In the mirror at the woman I am now

Once a 'Hippie' with love and freedom

My theme of peace and brand new ideals

Towards wife and mother, love in my life

Watching them grow, along with my heart

Then suddenly I see, all grown and so has me

Into this maturity, I once did not see

So here I sit, stare, think, and wonder

My life has been good, loving and kind

But oh how I so miss..

The days of once-upon-a-time....

Reviews

[Bear]

Me too... miss those days of "once upon a time"~~ guess we just have to get outta bed each day and continue onward and make new memories each day to gather for our future "once upon a time" future memory chats with those who'll listen, perhaps relate and hopefully not gruff much as we ramble on and on.
Enjoyed this much!
Sal

[Tate Morgan]

I have to say you should read the reviews i got today for our humanity and a lesson learned lol


While i like this peice, im going to have to be honest.
it didn't quite keep my focus soley on it. It let my mind wander.
and the emotion scratched me. but it didn't scare me.

it's a fine peice of art.

but i'm seeking exceptional. the flow was rather slow to me, and the line "fueling him run instead of tire"

it just... rubbed me like a bad carpet and i got carpet burn. i'm sorry. but i am being honest in this contest with every peice of art.
I really do hate to be such a b***h...


but i simply don't like your form of poetry. Now i know mine sucks. It does. Im not saying my work is what i prefer to readbecause it's not. I want to read poems that would actually be in an english class. A real peace of literature such that Shaekspear himself might right.
Now this is only one persons opinion and whil it's better to say nothing if you don't have anything nice to say, I will justify the resoning for either rejecting or keeping your work in my contest.

This has a bad form about it. It again burns my skin with it's carpet.

I honestly do like the story your portraying here. i just would rather see it in a different light

Posted 4 Hours Ago
I deleted them from her contest and so i guess the one other contestant wins by default Hate to offend her like that .
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/9210/submit/

[Tate Morgan]

This is the best you have written that i have seen .And for the first time i felt in reading a work of yours the pains of emotion that I can relate and It felt good to see through your feelings and my eyes
tate

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This I can relate to for the golden days of youth looked upon as our own "golden days" very nostalgic this anda longing for an innocence long past. This poem brings all that to the fore. just picture perfect.