He said 'I love you'

It is what it is...

He said 'I love you'

Sweet tender words

For me alone

They floated on by

My quickened heart

With wings they then

Did finally soar

I basked in its glory

Cried for such love

That I alone held

In the palm of my hand

Heart, deep inside

It resided to forever

stay, ahh sweet joy

I held, for no other..

 

Yet mere words it seems

To fly upon the sky

Into the darkened night

With no cares on the pain

Your words did carry

Stain for forever to lay

Upon my heart now broken

Never to have faith again

Trust now taken, forsaken

And I die...

Each moment, day, I waste

Away slowly.. And I die..

~~~~~

He said 'I love you'...

One time.. Long ago...

 

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

This is a very poignant and heartbreaking piece. The contrast between the initial joy and the eventual despair is very effective at conveying the emotional rollercoaster that the speaker experiences. The line "Yet mere words it seems" is particularly striking, as it highlights the fragility of language and how words can carry so much weight and yet be so easily discarded. The final lines, "Each moment, day, I waste away slowly... And I die.. One time.. Long ago..." are especially haunting, as they suggest that the speaker has been unable to move on from this painful experience. Overall, this is a very moving and powerful piece that captures the pain of lost love and shattered trust.

[Jackson Yang]

It has been forever since I last stopped by to read something that you have posted and to think it is something so amazing. It always makes me wonder why so many place so much value on those simple words even though they can be as hollow as everything else. You have such a great understanding in your work and I will catch up on as much as I can. Once again, amazing piece.

[Rossen]

just isn't fair....the price of love...nothing good lasts...and you know it... yet...
dammm ... smile and a few tears 100/100



Rossen

[StrixNebulosa]

when the words are hollow, I wish they couldn't be felt... the words you have penned above are anything but hollow...

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh wow, such a romantic begin then I was shot through the heart by your painful words. When we are betrayed by the one we love it is hard to trust another person again. As they say "once bitten, twice shy"

[Magdelena]

Thanks my sweets.... You know the saying.... Keep on truckin. :) Love ya to pieces and bits....

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Awe shucks love ya too hon. Glad to see you writing again.