Just a dream

I wrote this poem after dreaming my self and my girl being in a car accident and her family at that time wished to kill me.It just revolves around the situation inthe dream.

                    Just a dream
            out there be women,
              out there be men-
        with romours everyone is out,
           to see thee devil himself
                   they say ,

                   I did not

               its God I trust,
             for plans are his-
                its hope in me 

              for I shall adhere,
          and the Lord shall here

        unintentional it crashed,
                   bhhudluu,.......
                    peeee,..

                    I did not

                 

                 where am I ?
              the gal where is-
                  sir you in,.....
            up I was in hospital

            with the last voice,
             sir the girl - she,..... 
          fully i'm, they hate to thee 
             by they seek to kill.
                    I did not 

           

            it was the car sound ,
              out in the gate,
                it gave pee,........
              up I was aw_ke,
                 I did not

                but believe
                its a drEAM.

Author's Note

Please just build me,tell me what you think,......

Reviews

[James Tyler]

That was a very different style from any prose I've ever read. The broken thoughts and the sounds all seem like your thoughts in the moment. It gives a sense of your frustration with the situation. It was different. It made me think.

[Ayanda Musawami France Bulose]

I appritiate your comment brother thanks alot.but what did you think about?

[James Tyler]

There seemed to be a few misspelled words. I don't know if that was on purpose or not, but other than that. I really like your approach. Like I said, its unlike any I've ever seen before. The broken technique that you use gives the reader the feeling that you're frantic and discombobulated in your mind. The way most would feel after an accident. I like it because its unique and stands out. Does that help?

[Ayanda Musawami France Bulose]

indeed it does brother thanks alot.concerning the spelling only one word that i wrote it on purpose ''aw_ke'' but the other two i think i really misspelled thanks brother will adit.

[James Tyler]

No problem my friend. Glad I could help.