My Love

A poem to my girlfriend

 It is the beginning of an everlasting flame. 

All of life, all of happiness, all of desires,

for these things, Feed my new sacred flame.

 

My love for you is becoming exponential. 

You steal from my body of all thats right, 

The feeling is divine beyond logic.

 

Eternity and bliss is now understandable.

It is now acceptable...

It is now desirable...

It is now a thought that has made my purpose palpable.

 

Your existence defines purpose.

Intent to breath...

Intent to live...

Intent to cross the timeless existing space for you.

 

You can effortlessly steal the moons upon jupiter,

for all it takes is just one touch from your angelic fingers.

You are beyond time and space, you live 

life in all thats existential on this planet. 

 

Intelligence, whit, courage and bravery,

Are rare upon the beauty of females. 

Created by gods and goddesses themselves,

As if you are a waking piece of art, they envy you. 

 

You make life worth living... 

You make the future look alluring...

You make challenges appealing...

 

 

You... create... happiness...

Author's Note

I don't write much so I have a lot to learn. Please critique my structure if you have time, thanks! =)

Reviews

[BluesForTheRisingSun]

I think critisizing other's work is wrong, because in poetry, there is no wrong or right. But, as you mentioned in your note, the structure is a strong characteristic in this piece.
Its not bad, merely unsual. Poems tend to follow a specific structure, because it flows better read aloud. In this way, your poem sounds slightly disjointed. Which is not necessarily a bad thing. It could reflect the feeling of adoration, and your inability to stop listing her qualities.
An overall excellent piece, beautifully romantic :)