A Haiku

A tree losing its leaves to the wind and rain.. thought came, seeing the tree in my backyard,in California.

One last stretch, the branches shook

remaining leaves fall,

to join the drenched ones beneath.

Author's Note

I changed the original haiku to make it fit the format 7-5-7.

Reviews

[Solar]

Beautiful feline feel in the first two lines!

[Krizito]

I think your haiku is nice, I've tried writing a few myself. Good job!
A little pointer though, your first line is a syllable longer.

[Madhusudha]

Thanks Krizito. I hadn't attempted any so far, will work on that.. thats a useful feeback