Into My Forbidden Place

This is the only time I may admit I need someone. I have never dated, never loved, but I am starting to reconsider. This is a journey into something way too alien for me.

 

Come with me, as I hold your hand

Let me drag you into my forbidden place

Into my inner mindscape

A place where the Earth meets the Moon

A land only assessable through me

As I am the point were

The Earth meets the Moon

 

This is a realm of beauty and magic

But all your magic is more beautiful

 

I bring you closer to me

As we fall into a well of golden light

Let it coarse through us both

And let the light in us be one

 

My realm is a secret place

Where I share with no one

So to you, I hold the highest trust

For my heart can’t bear much more

 

This is a realm of pain and torment

But all your light will sooth me

 

I mesh all my pain here

With hope for the one who can remove it

Someone with the inner light

To destroy me

 

As I am still darkness

Reincarnation of the spirit is over due

And all though I fear you getting close

I know your light is stronger then my will

 

This is a realm of darkness and emptiness

But your will is so much stronger

 

I know you can break my darkness

You hold the only key in my heart

You hold the only candle in your soul

That is why I want to touch you

 

I know my fears will not let that be

I know for fact, I am a coward

And if I don’t dissolve

I will become more then darkness

 

This is a realm of dark desires

But I can’t stand seeing you hurt

 

I am more afraid of your pain

Then the pain I had to endure

In hope to see you happy

Would consume my very essence

 

I desire your happiness

I wouldn’t wish for anything more

But I know I can’t bring it to you

For I have never learned

 

This is a realm of paradox

And I know you are the solution

 

Let me close your mind

And remove all the anchors of thought

Let me pierce your mindscape

Let me be in your dreamscape

I just want to be, near you…

Reviews

[Dizzy-Izzy]

You say this is a journey into an alien land for you... that you have never loved. These words feel to me like they are written by one who has loved for ages but never revealed it to the object of their obsession...

I thought while reading this that perhaps you were taking the reader on a journey...

"Come with me, as I hold your hand, Let me drag you into my forbidden place"

I suppose that could be the case... but the words don't seem to be from a person who has never loved, only one who has never had their desire quenched by drinking the soothing wine from the lips of their beloved... "This is a realm of paradox And I know you are the solution" The angst of love and longing make this all the more intoxicating.

[Laura E. Aranda]

You are really talented. It was a heartbreaking piece that reminded me so much of Phantom of the Opera, which I loved....

[Angel Bird]

Wow!!!

A fabulous work!

Once started to read one is unable to stop. I'd file this piece into 'Art of Writing'!
You've done an incredible job here. The little black lines are my favorites and give even more power to the other grandiose lines.
An insightful, strong and very profound work!
Kudos!

[Rachel DeHart]

This is amazingly powerful. And very very very deep. The side stanza's are my favorite, and I feel like they reveal a lot through out the poem.

Keep writing, this is very intense stuff.!