Behold, The Black Earth is Upon Us

It's just my views on a few things. Why not be paranoid?

 

Elder Things, there bodies decay

 

Once the terror of the land

 

And worshiped in the ages

 

There bodies, under the Earth to decay

 

Corruption, the key to success

 

And yes, they know this too

 

As you bicker over there decay

 

As you integrate it in your everyday living

 

You keep warm by its toxic fumes

 

You burn it in a machine

 

Because you’re too helpless to walk

 

Metals are pressed in this, even plastics are molded

 

You need there fossilized remains

 

We war in the name of oil

 

Blood shed, to feed there young’s

 

The Elder Things do not forget

 

Outsiders, feeding on are blood

 

Breaking the edge of our Mothers Ward

 

You drive in there filth

 

To later be slaughtered and feed to them

 

They need are blood, you hand it to them

 

Selfish you are, hungry they become

 

Roam in there taint, bleed I n there names

 

Only one flames burns this taint

 

But you can’t bare it

 

And once you Pray to the Savior to Blind you of this

 

The biggest of all outsiders wait for you

 

As you again, kill in there name

 

Erect temples to honor them

 

And fuels there ever burning hatred of are kind

 

False love, for death

 

Harvested souls in the pit of there bellies

 

And blood for there offspring’s that do the motivating

 

Black Earth, Oil, and the Holy Book

 

All evils to be weary of

Reviews

[Michael X]

James.. this is clearly well written.. and the intent delivers a well suited meaning to the effect of cause..
reading this work.. i was struck by how well you seem to form your thoughts and design into wording..

straight line sentencing.. i disagree with the review below because one has to consider what form is..
this is prose poetry.. its not set with rhyme and meter.. thats just my opinion..as i read i felt the idea

you describe a sense of country.. and religion.. and how the entwine into a master plan.. and the way oil
seems to rule the world.. what i felt is the death.. is iraq dying for the sake of anothers ambition of power..

there is much to this writing to be considered before i would ever pick apart the way it is written.
but thats just my opinion.. you clearly have a wisdom .. i would consider this a well written insight.

[Angelic Darkness]

There is much conviction here. I feel your hatred, maybe, even revenge.
I feel you used blood and decay too often, which took images away from the
poem. AD

[samuel austin]

great work!
it portrays alot of emotion, almost giving a look at the world through your eyes. and its the sad truth.

[El Cu Cuy]

Hmmm. Hehehehehe. This...this is what we were waiting for. This is what we've dreamed of until now. This blasphemous, decryptic, agnostical piece of art. It makes you think of unimaginable horrors waiting beneath your head. Waiting to steal you away from reality. This piece is, by far, the best I've seen you do. It brings out the inner fears of the unknown to the readers. It's very descriptive of what we do in order to bring about the change we yearn for. I'd say that this would definitley be a piece worth ranting about. The minor errors don't really matter when it's the point that you make. You're letting everyone know that their actions towards this planet are harming THEM more than they are harming it.

[Wraith A.K.A. JB]

I like this piece very much. It speaks on various levels and minds sets. I can almost feel the heat from the flames tasteing the burning oil on my lips as I read through this piece. It tells of deceit betraial and a almost total failure of a somewhat universal unspoken promised trust,, along with the fear that comes along with this forceful deceit. Thankyou very much for your review I always appreciate feed back. I can feel the passion within your soul from looking over this poem.. I am going to just go on a internal feeling and assume that you have served this our country from what is said in this piece. Their is always the error factor within internal feelings but I feel the scenes as i read this as if they are pouring from your eyes from a first hand view.

-JB-

[Ray Hamilton]

Wow this is deep, but sadly true
We should be able to come up with something
that would replace this black fools gold
I enjoyed this write
Thanks for sharing
Ray

[Teenage poet]

Your intellect portrays and amazing passion for writing. It is very well written.

[Rakdos]

A very interesting poem. With an interesting tone and theme. This is once again another piece of your which reflects your genius!

[Hoshi Nami]

this made me feel really really sad- i felt like it was about all different types of death. The death of faith and of humans and of reality. Really powerful stuff.

[Moi]

I know you probably considered something of a stanza, but it turned out to be a messy cojoined read. Not to sound completely nasty, but, check your writing to make sure it's formatted to your liking before you post it up.

This poem seemed a little out of focus to me. Your images are confused. Is this a poem about the Elder Gods? Or is this spitting on big oil? I can't tell. The last line about holy books, and then "All evils to be weary of" completely threw me off too.

Reorganize this. Hone what you want to say. I'm sure you can make an allegory out of the Elder Gods while alluding to all sorts of things. You can do it. Make it work. Or Cthulhu won't be too impressed.