Show Me No Mercy

I am not sure where this one came from. Maybe it's the like of the fantasy villian, or the monster in us all.

 

Your sword at my neck, bled

Why did you stop?

You cut me, but you don’t finish

You hurt me, but you help me up

Why do you do this, it make no sense

You think I would have lifted my sword from your throat

You think I would have been so merciful

I hand you my dagger now

I throw it down to your feet

You have beaten me, this is not over yet

Pick up my blade, show me your hatred

Show me the inspiration of this fight

Are you even a man?

You have beaten me, I have lost

My life is yours to take

You have won, now take the prize

You are free, choose wisely

For if I live, I will have my revenge

And if I find you again

May it be a fair fight till the end

Reviews

[El Cu Cuy]

Ooo...sounds like an interesting Malkavian concept. Oh well. I can see the symbology in this. The loser wishes for an end to the climactic battle. The other wishes to continue it. Is the first the protagonist and the second the antagonist? Or is it the other way around. Who knows. Maybe they both are the protagonists and the idea of it is the antagonist. A though coursing through their heads. It's very thought provoking.

[BenightedWhispers]

Wow. Incredible write. It kept me guessing and in suspense. Great job.

[Angelic Darkness]

Hmmm...you want this person to show no mercy, take your life,
yet this person gives you another chance, maybe, you leave us as
readers wondering. I believe both characters are you fighting with
your ownself. Just my opinion. I think we all fight what we know
is witnin us, wanting to keep it neatly inside, afraid of what others
might see. Your poems are riddled with different visuals and outcomes.
It makes the reader think and ponder. AD

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

I really like this.... It shows the confusion in the mind of the loser... I'm not really sure what else to say... I loved the flow and feel of this... Really it's a great poem.... It's unique to me... i haven't read anything like this... Great Job!!

[lark]

Hm. Interesting. This back-and-forth motion between the victim (+/-) and the attacker.

You cut me, but you don't finish
You hurt me, but you help me up

And you have this masochistic thread...

I hand you my dagger now
I throw it down at your feet

You sneer at this mercy, but you won't be happy until one of you is dead. And they're obviously much stronger than you, and you have no choice. Like... you were the one who wanted this fight in the first place. You want the opportunity to kill them/otherwise finish them off... And it seems like you're sort of projecting.
...I see the crazy in you, not them haha...

Anger's a b***h.

I'm not sure if lines 6 and 7 are wordplay, or just spelling errors... Dunno...