Never Wrote a Sonnet Before

Been writing poetry for a bit now, this is my first time ever using structured metre lol

 There is in me something I don’t understand

 that wishes for something more than myself.

 I don’t want to be that hollow, bitter man

 causing pain around me, destroying my health.

 But I am always fighting my carnal nature

 which seeks to devour those around me.

 How weak is this flesh, this I know for sure

 it is selfish and hungry for all it can see.

 But my soul, it is hungry for something more

 than these flesh-love desires and craving hunger.

 It wants your heart for all those things I adore

 how you make my soul pause, my mind wonder.

    You make me want more than your skin;

     it’s your soul I desire, it saves me within.

Author's Note

Never wrote a sonnet before. Actually, never wrote anything that has structured rhythm and rhyme before. So, this was really just for fun and practice. Not really my kind of thing lol

Reviews

[Apatheia]

This is beautiful. I loved this one. I can relate so much. You did a really good job. :D

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, but I think this will be my last foray into writing standard style like this lol Not my thing. It was fun to experiment, though xD And even my "fun" experiment turned into something serious. *sigh*

[Apatheia]

Hahah, that's okay. :P Atleast it was good!

[Starfruitanimal]

beautifully written and full of raw emotion....

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you ^^ I never wrote a sonnet before this, so I really just wanted to take a shot at a new style. It was a fun experiment, but I still wanted to talk about some of the things I think and care about. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and it's good to see your review, as always ^^

[Sacha Davison]

You have an ability to take any style of literature and make it your own. Its always a pleasure to see your work in my read requests!

[MachinaWriter]

And its always a pleasure to see your reviews, so the feeling is mutual ^^ I have to be careful with this site, all you people are going to give me an ego and in my mind I still have so much to learn and improve on. I doubt I'll ever be at the point I want to be as a poet.

[Sacha Davison]

There is ALWAYS room for improvement, especially when it comes to writing. You certainly have a way with words though!

[RachelReaper]

Machina, I think you could write literally ANYTHING and it would turn out awesome. Seriously, you could write one sentence, and somehow it would turn into a beautiful, poetic work of art. :) You. Are. Wonderful.

[MachinaWriter]

Don't get my ego all inflated lol xD Its really not me. Its my muse. She's the inspiration. She paints all these things in my heart and mind. I simply try my best to describe the things she makes me see, with words and limited vocabulary lol Oh, but I did do a sentence the other day for my muse lol It went: Joyful kind lovers, meeting now over precious questions
revolving still today.
Told her that its all the letters between I and U.

[RachelReaper]

see?! One sentence.. bam. Awesome. And anyways, that's so sweet :) I bet that person adores you

[eglantine]

glad to see you exploring writing styles.

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, but I don't think I enjoy this one too much lol It was fun to experiment, but I don't think its really my kind of thing.

[eglantine]

haha yea, same.

[MachinaWriter]

I feel like I'm learning poetry backwards. Don't people usually start with structure and then leave it? lol

[eglantine]

hmm, I guess that is how I learned it lol

[C.C. Marx]

I hates restrictions and structure but hats off to you, you did a good job :)

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you. I hate structure too lol Not my style, but I wanted to try it just for fun.

[Anonymous Girl]

I would agree with Meallea Pomorette, they are hard to interprete... I always get them wrong... Although I understand the wording
But still... Beautifully written.. A proper sonnet!! ^^

[MachinaWriter]

lol ty though I doubt I'll ever write a sonnet again. Well, at least not for a long time. Just not my thing lol I'm glad you liked it though.

[Anonymous Girl]

You are welcome ^^

[Meallea Pomorette]

I must admit that I am not a fan of sonnets... They are some sometimes hard to interpret... Which reminds me that I had a hard time interpreting Shakespeare's sonnets...
But still your works are really nice... and I'm sure you can get the hang of writing sonnets soon...

" There is in me something I don’t understand
that wishes for something more than myself."
It happens to all people...

" it’s your soul I desire, it saves me within. "
Sounds like an obsession...

There are many deep and hidden meanings here..
I have nothing more to say...
Thumbs up!!!

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, this'll probably be the only sonnet I do lol It was just for fun, but its not my style lol Thanks for reading, though. I would, however, love to hear your thoughts on my poem Painted Skies, if you get the chance. lol I hate standardized structure in my poetry lol

[Meallea Pomorette]

I'll read it when I found some time...
Probably when I'm done with my programming projects...
(^_^)

[MachinaWriter]

Darn programming. lol I have little to no understanding of technology. I'm in the wrong time period. haha Take your time, its good whenever you get a chance lol ^^

[kublakhan27]

This is phenomenal for something that isn't your thing...to try a sonnet as your first fixed-form piece is pretty ambitious^^

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you. I tend to usually let my poems evolve as they wish. For a good example of my style of poetry, I'd recommend looking at my one "Painted Skies", that's my usual kind of work. This is totally different lol But I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was a fun experiment.

[kublakhan27]

lol I wish I could have this much fun writing :P I'm starting to doze off now but I'll check it out tomorrow if I get the chance

[MachinaWriter]

If you do, that would be amazing. If not, then I still appreciate you taking the time for this one. ^^

[kublakhan27]

I will...I'm adding you to my friends list so I'll remember^^