A Willow of a Man

A Willow of a Man

A Poem by MachinaWriter
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What do the willows say...

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We lay and watch the heavens

-a wishing well of far-away stars.

It’s half past eleven,

-the world is wondering where we are.

 

Summer nights with fireflies,

-fallen wishes floating with the breeze.

A place away from hurt and lies,

-hidden behind the trees.

 

I tell you about my childhood,

-wandering these paths.

Far behind my family’s home,

-the moments that didn’t last.

 

You spy upon the willow tree,

-right behind my home.

“Why does it weep?” you ask.

It weeps because it’s alone.

 

Somewhere through the trees,

-its lover is locked away.

Forever lost, in roots of chains,

-behind winding lanes it stays.

 

You rise from your grassy bed,

-tears in your eyes.

“But why?” you said,

I shake my head,

not wishing you to cry.

 

“No one knows.” I whisper,

-my voice soft and low.

You turn to the branch,

-of this lonely weeping willow.

A widow amongst the forest,

-its branches singing in the wind,

a lonesome, quiet chorus,

-longing for a friend.

 

Your hand touches the branch,

-a canopy of arms,

swaying around its trunk

protecting its heart from harm.

The green of your dress,

-reminds me of the grass,

swaying in the wind,

saying I’m home at last.

 

“Why doesn’t she cry?”

 

I tell her then a secret,

-making her promise to keep it.

I deliver notes between the willows.

A secret nobody knows.

 

“But how does she write?”

 

I listen and she tells me,

-I say, pulling out a book.

You turn, you look,

-as if trying to hear,

all the things it’s saying.

Does it whisper your fears?

That like the willow,

-in age you’ll grow,

alone at the end of your years?

 

“She has so much to say,

-but she doesn’t know how to.”

I give you the pen and paper,

-saying you can save her.

The writing comes to you.

 

I say nothing as you write,

-scribbling its tears

scratching as you fight,

to make up for the years

of my absence.

I grew up too fast,

and have since missed

the missive that was meant

for me to have sent.

 

Thinking then, I know

-perhaps we are dreamers.

But writing that note,

-you and I become believers

in things the willows say.

That love can exist,

-even if its far away.

 

We take that precious note,

-spoke from the willow’s soul,

a missive of poetic secrets

written so we can keep it,

safe on our forest stroll.

 

Fireflies dance,

along that wooded trail

and I recall the tale

of Hansel and Gretel

wondering why

they ever left their home.

Because all too fast,

-the breadcrumbs crumble

they never last

and then you’re all alone.

 

We come upon the clearing,

-of the other willow weeping.

But it lays upon its back,

-forevermore its sleeping.

Its tangled roots,

they seek the moon,

as if reaching for its lover,

saying I’ll see you soon.

 

“He never got her note.”

You say, breathless.

Your fist shakes, restless.

The paper in your hand,

crumbled up,

alone.

I step forward and stumble,

over an upturned stone.

 

You drop the note,

-and quickly come to my side.

You realize the willow tree,

-uprooted and alone,

far away from home,

                      is truly me.

 

We take the note,

-clasped between our hands,

and dig a hole beneath the roots

of the willow that is a man.

We place the letter there,

-and bury it deep.

So the willow will know

-his lover’s words while he sleeps.

 

“What did she say?”

I asked, our hands still clasped.

You smile when you speak:

“I’m never far away,

no matter how far it seems

I’m with you always,

-in your heart and in your dreams.”

© 2012 MachinaWriter


Author's Note

MachinaWriter
Based off a dream of mine I had last night. Let me know what you all think ^^ Again, acknowledgments go to Southern Cross, who, as always, was an immense help.

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Reads like a lover's fairy tale. Immersed in imagery and so poetic. This is more a poetic short story to me and the flow just carried on like waves on a calm ocean. I agree with Kelsey. I don't understand how you write such quality pieces in such a short time.
"“I’m never far away,
no matter how far it seems
I’m with you always,
-in your heart and in your dreams.” This is such a beautiful ending..I'm a sucker for romance .


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

lol I have an amazing muse, she helps keep me inspired. Without her I'd probably be doing a haiku a .. read more
Southern Cross

12 Years Ago

:)



Reviews

That's a pretty cool dream indeed. I'm really tired and I should NOT be trying to review work at 5:30 am.

Posted 12 Years Ago


MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

I know the feeling, man. I have trouble sleeping all the time. Here and there I sleep just fine, dep.. read more
Sacha Davison

12 Years Ago

I can relate alot to that. I have reviewed and read as much as my mind is capable of right now. My R.. read more
MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

lol you too, bro. get some rest.
Great write. I loved it

Posted 12 Years Ago


MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

Thank you ^^
Ok, I can say this because you know I enjoy your work and doubtless you have certain talents. This one I found harder to follow not because of it's length - that never worries me unless it's beyond ridiculous in length. It's more down to certain words in certain places that prevent the piece from running smoothly. I agree with DrD about mechanics..sometimes I wish I had given more thought to mine when i read back on them. So for this piece, because it incorporates a story and rhyme - a metre would be helpful as well, but then that takes more discipline when writing.

I wouldnt bother saying any of that if I didn't enjoy what I read...what I don't enjoy I usually stop reading and don't review. This is fulll of such much that is good and beautiful...because you have talent, you have a duty to perfect it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

Without reviews like yours, I'd become content and never strive to improve. I need people like you, .. read more
Patrick

12 Years Ago

Of course, a metre isn't necessary..at all...I see you point in that. I suppose, I would be interest.. read more
MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

A poetic piece of wisdom from a great poet ^^ Thank you. And again, I appreciate the honest review. .. read more
Nice inspiration... Dreams really help a lot... Now I'm thinking that you are an oracle..
I really like the way you write... There's an easy flow to it and you know how to captivate your readers...

I have so many favorite lines here... but here are some...
"We lay and watch the heavens
-a wishing well of far-away stars."
For me, the stars are the dreams of a couple, the well is the opportunity and the heaven is the world...

"A place away from hurt and lies,
-hidden behind the trees."
It's true that such place is really hidden...

"-the moments that didn’t last."
Life keeps going on!!! There are so many opportunities to explore...

"-its lover is locked away."
This reminds me of something about Greek mythology... Humans used to have 4 hands and 2 heads so Zeus split them apart making them live their lives looking for the other half...

"It weeps because it’s alone."
Virtual hugs!!! It's not alone anymore...

"That love can exist,
-even if its far away."
So true... I had watched many lovers come and go and there are only few with this kind of love...

“I’m never far away,
no matter how far it seems
I’m with you always,
-in your heart and in your dreams.”
This reminds me of Romeo and Juliet... A perfect ending...

This one is really beautiful...
And I really read it over and over again!!!
I have so many favorite lines here but I can't put all cause they remind me of so many things...
Nice poem...
Thumbs up!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Meallea Pomorette

12 Years Ago

I can't believe this is really long... And I still have so many favorite lines here... aaawww
MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

lol I think the length of its scared a lot of people away, unfortunately. I sort of let these things.. read more
Meallea Pomorette

12 Years Ago

Yes... The length really scared me too... But lengths don't matter it... What matters is the content.. read more
I always enjoy reading your work. I'm amazed at how quickly you write these things, I can't seem to find the time lol. It flowed beautifully. You're someone to look up to. Good job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

Thank you, man, that really means a lot. Yeah, I don't sleep lol Only reason I get the time to do th.. read more
I really like the flow of this. It has alot of feeling and rythm and is a very powerful piece. I'm not even a romance fan but this is very moving and touching to me^^ The imagery is so suberb and beautiful I can picutre the whole thing. I can honestly say that I loved this^^

Posted 12 Years Ago


MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

Thank you, that truly means a lot ^^ Feel free to take a look at any of my other poetry, if you get .. read more
Amber Tasch

12 Years Ago

of course I will!
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DrD
The imagry within the tree representing human emotion is good and valid. I was a bit confused by the mechanics. The first five stanzas having four lines each and then the style abandoned into a more free-style form. It did not, however, detract from the theme of the writing and the word selection is very good. In short, it is an enjoyable read worth reading again.

Posted 12 Years Ago


MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

Its something I've been struggling with. Its as if the beginning of all my poems is constrained as I.. read more
The poignancy of young lovers and elder willows both ensure depth and quality of truth that can only be found in love. The quality written work, shows a part of you, deep inside, may have perhaps lived this out in some form or fashion. Well done! Truly a marvel of grace, and poise! One of your best yet!
My hope for you is that you live out what you have just written; live it out in life and love it even in death!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Reads like a lover's fairy tale. Immersed in imagery and so poetic. This is more a poetic short story to me and the flow just carried on like waves on a calm ocean. I agree with Kelsey. I don't understand how you write such quality pieces in such a short time.
"“I’m never far away,
no matter how far it seems
I’m with you always,
-in your heart and in your dreams.” This is such a beautiful ending..I'm a sucker for romance .


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

lol I have an amazing muse, she helps keep me inspired. Without her I'd probably be doing a haiku a .. read more
Southern Cross

12 Years Ago

:)
So beautifully written, my friend. You've been on a roll lately, with all this new poetry of yours. It's quite amazing that you keep so many quality pieces coming, all of them so beautiful in their own way. I really enjoyed the story this told, and, of course, the way it was. Wonderful job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

I've had a lot of inspiration lately ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed it. Its good to hear from you, its been.. read more
Kelsey

12 Years Ago

It certainly has. You were busy a while ago, and now I'm the busy one, lol. Good to hear from you as.. read more

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