Sins of an Angel

A new kind of poem for me...

She’s a winter saint,
pure, she can cure

your twisted taint with but a faint

-smile.

 

Every step is a dance of grace,

-soft-footed ballet

I must say, I think I see a trace

of something else on that face.

As she bites that lower lip,

-tracing the lines on her dress

with her fingertips,

my heart’s distressed, I must confess

I’ve forgot the dance,
                I'm lost in the melody.

 

Head-over heels.

Like the ones she’s wearing.

And as she moves, I’m stuck staring,

at her every motion.

I think I found reason for devotion.

I never pray, but I might begin.

She moves smooth like the ocean,

and I feel like diving in.

She’s an angel,

-but she makes me want to sin.

 

So there you go,

-hang up that halo.

Drop the dress

and we’ll forget the rest

of the world and its pain.

I'll hold you close,

-amidst the rain.

I’ll whisper a prayer,

-against your skin.

When no one’s there,

-this angel sins.

 

She’s an angel of winter,

-because God sent her.

Even at the room’s edge

-she’s in the center.

She dances words in my ear,

-as I hold her near.

And though their full of fear,

-I try and clear the tears.

 

I’ll hug you tight, this winter night

-on a rug by the fire,

casting shadows of us,

wrapped up in desire.

Kissing prayers to you,

-taking your flame higher.

 

And when we’re done,

-she’ll put that halo on,

and lay close to me.

Listening to my heart beat,

-inside my chest.

Creating our own heat,

-as we simply rest.

 

She’s a winter saint,

pure, she can cure

my twisted taint, with but a faint

-smile.

But unfortunately, it's been a while

since I’ve seen that side of you.

And every day I wish

-there was something I could do.

That with a single kiss,

-I could help you fly again.

This beautiful girl,

-this angel that sins.

Author's Note

Just something I wrote up for fun. Criticism is always welcome. That means you eglantine xD Be sure to let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Kelsey]

"Head-over heels.
Like the ones she’s wearing.
And as she moves, I’m stuck staring,
at her every motion.
I think I found reason for devotion.
I never pray, but I might begin.
She moves smooth like the ocean,
and I feel like diving in.
She’s an angel,
-but she makes me want to sin."

Wow. Just, wow. The flow of this is absolutely amazing, and the entire piece just blew me away. That was my favorite part; I felt it told a story of its own in just one verse, yet still fit so beautifully in with the piece as a whole. I love the story this tells, as well. You can really feel the emotion between the two, and the way the man thinks of her is just, absolutely beautiful. The whole thing is amazing, I'm truly in awe. One of my favorite pieces of yours, hands down. x

[MachinaWriter]

lol Thank you ^^ As always, I'm happy to hear your reviews again.

[DrD]

I have surfed through some of your work and I have to admit that this is my favorite at this point. I like the haunting element of its imagry and the final resignation it speaks of. this is excellent work that I truly enjoyed reading.

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, I really appreciate that, especially coming from you. Different poems come from different places, and the place this came from was new to me. I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^^

[Southern Cross]

Like the touch of erotica..Classy but the soft tones are evident. Different tempo for you..kinda Uncle Cracker smilin attitude to it. LOL

[MachinaWriter]

Darn Uncle Kracker lol Yeah, I don't usually write this kind of thing. Not sure where the idea came from lol