My Shadow

A poem about building up walls...

Everywhere I go,

-there’s my shadow right behind.

He says all the things,

-that are really on my mind.

 

He tells you he loves you,

-even when I’m quiet.

I write a lot of words and secrets

-he tells you what he meant by it.

 

I’m self controlled,

-he takes control.

I’m the brains and words,

-he’s the heart and soul.

 

I’m the consequence,

-of another broken heart.

But if he could give his two cents,

-he’d say to make a new start.

 

And it makes me think…

Is he the shadow?

Or is it me?

In these shallow waters I sink,

-yet its him who sets me free.

 

I’m the shadow of my soul,

-hiding the true me from the light.

Maybe I should give him control,

-take back my life and fight.

 

But will she accept?

If I were to have leapt,

would I fall to the depths?

Is it worth losing my shadow,

-the only thing left?

Reviews

[Meallea Pomorette]

The first two lines really creeps me out... The very first thing that I imagined are ghosts... A sighed in relief as I read the next lines...

"I write a lot of words and secrets
-he tells you what he meant by it."
That person really understands you...

"In these shallow waters I sink,
-yet its him who sets me free."
Based here, the person has a lot of influence on you...

"But will she accept?"
This part confused me a little bit because you used "she" here while on the latter parts you used "he"

"If I were to have leapt,
would I fall to the depths?"
That depends on where you fall right?

Nice poem as always...
(^_^)

[MachinaWriter]

lol That's because the shadow and the girl I'm talking about are two different people. I am the shadow. Its the subconscious, or that part of ourselves that we don't show.

[Meallea Pomorette]

Ooohhhh... I get it...
(^_^)

[Kelsey]

Somehow, this struck me as a little different than what I've been reading by you lately, but don't ask me why, for I haven't a clue. Nonetheless, I really enjoyed it. You never fail to blow me away with your beautiful word choice and lovely setup, let alone the stories you tell through your poetry. As always, I'm impressed.

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you. Yeah, this one felt different to write, as well. Different mindset when writing it. I'm glad you enjoyed it ^^

[Anonymous Girl]

But will she accept?
If I were to have leapt,
would I fall to the depths?
Is it worth losing my shadow,
-the only thing left?
Loved this stanza! Thats true that a shadow can't leave you but when it comes to love life... It's your choice if you want to leave it or keep it... nice working!! :)

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you ^^ I really liked this poem, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Anonymous Girl]

I liked it as well :)

[Southern Cross]

"Is it worth losing my shadow,
-the only thing left?" You are so much more than your shadow. Really loved the way you worked this. You and your shadow mirror images , yet so different. I think we all have various sides to our persona. The brave, the weak..opposites yet the same. well done and quite a different twist to this psychology of our lives.
"I’m the shadow of my soul,
-hiding the true me from the light." Touching line. When I see a wall, I tend to want to climb it because it's a quicker way to get to the other side.

[MachinaWriter]

Very astute of you. I was hoping you'd like this one.