Childish Ways

A collaborative poem between me and Serenus...

If you’re under 21

You are too young for this content

I’m way too grown to deal

With anyone’s childish non-sense

 

No need for back talk

Or any smart-aleck comments

If you don’t understand the concept

Let me put it into context

 

I’m a grown man

And I don’t play childish games

I give respect

And I expect the same

 

I don’t think you hear

What I’m trying to convey

When I grew up

I put away my childish ways

 

When I was young

I spoke just like you

Sharp tongued- loaded gun

Quick and ready to shoot

 

When I was young

I was too immature to reason

But wisdom came with time

And rough, unpredictable seasons

 

When I was young

 I didn’t understand

All it took to be a man

 

Never had a father

To guide me with his hand

So the idea of “Manhood”

I couldn’t fully comprehend

 

So to all of the young men out there

This is all I’m really trying to say…

It’s time to grow up and cast aside

 Your childish ways

 

Set aside,
Your childish notions
Lock and hide,
-your uncertain emotions.

They blind you from the path,
Now looking back at the past
I can't help but laugh.

Those childish notions, created a noise
Made by the sound of wild-ish boys
When I couldn't understand,
That when becoming a man
I had to cast aside those childish toys.

As true as scripture,
-those childish ways
Have faded to pictures.
Now I think,
Of how the world differs.

Its more than the things we defined
-as important in our childish minds.
With jobs and bills,
-We leave those behind.
With thoughts of wills,
-and what our future will find.

So to all those young men,
-who are still living as boys.
Cast aside such childish ways,
-but keep your child-like joy.

Author's Note

Okay, so this poem was a collaborative effort between me and Serenus. He wrote the first half and I added to it with the second half of the poem. My part begins at "Set aside/ your childish notions/lock and hide/your uncertain emotions." This is done with minimal editing, and we might work it out a little differently in the future. But for now, this will do ^^

Reviews

[Southern Cross]

Never noticed the break of flow and glad I read it before the description or I would have looked for the end of one to become the beginning of the other..again I feel this one like an urban song... has a beat to it

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, it was fun trying to match the flow of what someone else wrote. Serenus has some great poetry, as well, so we decided to do a collab, both having similar styles and views on things. We both tend to have a beat to our writing lol Thanks for reading it ^^

[Kelsey]

It's crazy to think that this was done by two people, because it flows so wonderfully and fits together so well. As always, great job.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Although I believe it is good to be not so serious all the time and have little fun every now and then, I can fully understand this piece. You should not be too immature and act like a two year old. Great collaboration. Nicely done to you both.

[RachelReaper]

I'm 14 and it irks me how immature some people are, even at my age... nice write on this. Hey, could you come to my school and tell this to 90% of the male population there? It would be appreciated.

[Hester Vane]

I like the message in this piece. I am only 22 and it shocks me sometimes how immature some under 21s are! Its embarrasing! A great write!

[MachinaWriter]

Funny thing is, I'm only 20 lol

[Hester Vane]

Sorry! See, i thought you were older than that! Well you are an expcetion then! Im glad there are people like you out there! :-) Lol.

[Sirius King]

thats funny i forgot you were under 21 lol... but i wrote that part before the collab lol

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, I'm young. lol I just have an old soul. Years of hardship will do that to a person.

[Sirius King]

lol...believe me i know all about it man
im 25 n been through a lot...but it gives u strength and wisdom

[MachinaWriter]

Not to mention, something to write about lol

[Sirius King]

lol exactly, its inspiration...and writing is the pain medicine

[Sirius King]

Damn Good Poem If I Don't Say So Myself...Good Work Guys! lol

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